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ceiling

by not_a_philosopher

Member since 2005 · Posted 6 Apr 2005 · 2 comments

If God is in the ceiling and shame is on the floor, then I would rather have my head in the clouds all day, then waste time staring at two shuffling feet.

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[6] Dovina 7-Apr-05/12:29 PM Reply
The last verse doesn't fit - it would have to deal with shame to fit. then -> than.
[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom 8-Apr-05/3:00 AM Reply
The last two lines, start off okay(timing wise, writing wise they are a horrid trainwreck), but notice. In the other two pairs of lines, (and;in). Filler words, to spread your timing out better.