Re: Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	zodiac 212.118.16.50	18-Jun-05/2:26 AM
These are the least naughty poems I've ever read.
Re: Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	zodiac 212.118.16.50	18-Jun-05/3:06 AM
And, *********PLAGIARISM ALERT*********** You don't seem to have gotten the point last time, lil_evil_boi (or seem to be unable to distinguish between things you've heard once and things you've invented yourself). You must go running to record companies all the time with some song you've written, only to find it's "Losing My Religion". Nentwined: Not that you need to, but google any line from any of these. The most egregious ones are actual bumper stickers.
Re: word splatter by nentwined	smiffy84 82.37.197.13	18-Jun-05/9:57 AM
Hmmmmm, i recal this poem in the Poetry Corner forum on www.braingell.com, why bother with the shower? Just hold your breath
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 204.110.227.157	18-Jun-05/10:07 AM
Ha! and later you'll get rolled for your wallet.
Re: the ten two eight tide by Mr Pig	INTRANSIT 204.110.227.157	18-Jun-05/10:24 AM
Howarya pig? This has such a great underlying rhythm that I think it should be turned up just a notch. Give it a form I think it'll be fine.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	Mr Pig 213.122.71.246	18-Jun-05/10:31 AM
hot diggity dog its bloody fantastic. 6th stanza good golly.
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/11:21 AM
Smothered in kisses, the dramatic impact drowned in saliva.
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	18-Jun-05/3:25 PM
Sounds like an over excited guinea pig humping its food bowl.
Re: This or That by sacred_poet_me	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/3:36 PM
The core consists actually of two lines: 'Will he go to the end of the world for her? Will he also do household chores for her?' No real problem to extend the message, but you could have used a bit more humor, more sarcasm. The last 4 lines add nothing.
Re: Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	18-Jun-05/4:05 PM
Dear diary, I feel so blue Engaged, for more than sixty years I love him still o yes I do I hide from him my flood of tears Smile every time he says, Quack cheese! *sob* Will Donald ever make my wish come true and fill me up with little duckies? (sneaky way to post 2 DoubleU poems within one hour)
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:51 PM
I don't hate this. mostly.
Re: Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:53 PM
you're spelling is awesome.
Re: This or That by sacred_poet_me	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/4:56 PM
Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.
Re: At The End by lil_evil_boi	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:00 PM
no
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:02 PM
take you where?
Re: It Could Be Worse by smiffy84	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/5:03 PM
Blair Witched?
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	gothiclovepoetiss 172.156.183.224	18-Jun-05/7:13 PM
hope you like this one,... another one of mine is "perfect place" plz rank that one too!!! thx
Re: i'm falling for u damnit! by clumseYdaiseY	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/8:58 PM
Most of the rhymes are forced and there are a few grammar issues. Elimate the metaphors that don't work and you might yet become an e e cummings.
Re: A scarce flower~ by clumseYdaiseY	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:09 PM
The first 4 verses were excellent. That's exactly the level of abstraction that best suits your style. You can often make a stronger point by allow the reader to think about where you may be coming from in your life with your writing than you do when you spell it out for them.
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:14 PM
I think "BIG EGO" or "BIG PENIS" is implied somewhere. I almost missed the last line. I rated the poem high, but I like political and social work more than most people.