Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:19 PM
Trite in places with a couple forced rhymes, but overall very expressive. I probably shouldn't have rated this since I tend to be a little harsh on love poems.
Re: ~Witchcraft~ by Lenore	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:24 PM
Sweet! Nice rhythm. The rhymes work. The images are vivid.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined	Joshua_Tree 68.230.105.101	18-Jun-05/9:44 PM
Try "time worn smooth by emery" and you have a very tight, almost technically perfect piece.
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/11:05 PM
sometimes feelings lie
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.182.174	18-Jun-05/11:07 PM
I remember the swap meet over on Slawson.
Re: A Message from my Dreams by Joshua_Tree	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.8	19-Jun-05/1:10 AM
An interesting variation on the two main rhyme schemes. You seem to get a bit lost in the words in the middle, and in line 8 the words "She directs" are not iambic. However the biggest problem, technically is in the last line where 'hangs on' is a serious miss step, giving you a 'dum dum' where you need a 'dum da'.
Re: Nonsense POEM #14687 by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.8	19-Jun-05/1:13 AM
Nonsense poetry, traditionally has rhyme and rhythm to compensate for the lack of meaning.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	zodiac 213.186.177.137	19-Jun-05/4:47 AM
I liked the title. I don't see how it relates to the poem. Which is also good.
Re: A Message from my Dreams by Joshua_Tree	zodiac 213.186.177.137	19-Jun-05/5:26 AM
Not enough variation to avoid rhyming "love" and "above". You might be tempted to ask, What's wrong with that? This is: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=97622
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/6:57 AM
Golly. I now realise the title is the worst mistake a poet can make... Anyone under the age of 50 sees no reason to read the poem. :-|
Re: Contemplation by raiyna	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:04 AM
...contemplation...by...a...tortoise... In other words; you ruined your own poem.
Re: White Stork by Blue Magpie	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:09 AM
Often the AA-BB form has all the subtility of a slogan for sanitary towels, bt you managed quite elegantly. A pleasant read.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	19-Jun-05/7:15 AM
A loverly relationship.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:40 AM
>>The rain from spain falls mainly in their veins.<< Ah! My Fair Lady in a theatrical reworking by Cheech & Chong!
Re: White Stork by Blue Magpie	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.180	19-Jun-05/10:30 AM
Good form.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.180	19-Jun-05/10:37 AM
Yeah, you're right. Those pumpkin shells don't keep them very well.
Re: word splatter by nentwined	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.180	19-Jun-05/10:43 AM
So many nights just like the one described make me resonate with this poem. Now I have to shower with my flat screen monitor. A bit of William Carlos Williams or Carlos William Carlos in this one.
Re: Kiss Me by smiffy84	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.180	19-Jun-05/10:47 AM
fire, blisters, kiss me, take me away with your gothic foreplay... but not this lifetime; not today.-3- for length.
Re: A limerick by smiffy84	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.180	19-Jun-05/10:52 AM
When I heard this (let's see. I was twelve), It ended with the word "brother." Incest is always best in limerick form.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/10:59 AM
Somehow the first half and the second half do not gel. I'm curious to know why. Because the 'introduction' is too scientific? Yes! The implications of the facts in the first part are so overwhelming, so chilling, that they degrade the loneliness of the characters to an absolute triviality. Microcosmic specks, lost in an incomprehensible infinity. But it's Infinity that awes, not those human specks.