regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 172.191.199.172	30-Jun-05/11:06 PM
Oh, my, but haven't we been a busy boy with our new rating system. 0's all around. Yes chuck, I'd like to buy a ZERO. Do you suppose that's a bit harsh? really when you consider it, hell man, who are you to crush these smouldering dreams into ash, at least let them snuff themselves out with a woebegotten two. eh?I kept paging back on your voting history... Damn, man, you've crushed alot of spirit.
regarding some deleted poem...	anitawit 210.211.168.104	1-Jul-05/12:58 AM
That's a new way of getting your poems read!
Re: What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn	Nuit 86.128.123.14	1-Jul-05/12:21 PM
Very well written.
Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	Dovina 12.72.7.163	1-Jul-05/4:05 PM
illution - us a spell checker. I think the voice of the first verse could be carried through to greater effect. Toward the end it get whiney and loses impact.
Re: it's okay to cry, idiot by calliope	Dovina 12.72.7.163	1-Jul-05/4:08 PM
"idiot" in the title detracts. Line 2 could be left out without loss.
Re: Drowsy by elderking	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.165	1-Jul-05/5:42 PM
Those waltz days, Those do-not-run days, that lounge... Yeah! Great mood-ivation.
Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	2-Jul-05/12:07 AM
I enjoyed this. well done.
Re: Try Thinking Too by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	2-Jul-05/12:44 AM
very vivid. well done. 8
Re: Uncorked by impert&ent	Dovina 12.72.4.83	2-Jul-05/6:18 AM
You have totally changed the poem and called it an edit. I think it's better to post a new poem. Anyway, this depends on a reader's knowledge of allusions. Maybe it means something to someone else.
Re: What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn	Dovina 12.72.4.83	2-Jul-05/6:25 AM
I'd like it better with good punctuation and complete sentences and line breaks at meaningful locations. As is, you can know if a man's a guitar player by feeling the tips of his fingers on the left hand. And I can see from the last lines you're angry. But I think it would be stronger with fewer words.
regarding some deleted poem...	Nuit 86.128.162.234	2-Jul-05/1:16 PM
Love it.
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 69.194.111.159	2-Jul-05/7:27 PM
dammit, you could have at least tried
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 213.122.70.19	3-Jul-05/1:14 AM
One of the better whiteley poems I've read. Vorderman will miss the pay cheque more.
Re: it's okay to cry, idiot by calliope	Caducus 213.122.70.19	3-Jul-05/1:15 AM
Line one is awesome.
Re: The choices we make by darby pyn	Caducus 213.122.70.19	3-Jul-05/1:17 AM
Heartfelt and sentmental but your problem lies in not what you want to say, just the way you dilute it with forced rhyme. Force what you wanna say first. Allegiance to rhyme should not dictate the poem.
Re: We Have Never Spoken by fevriere	Caducus 213.122.70.19	3-Jul-05/1:21 AM
THe last 2 stanzas are so adult in their honesty and deliverance. LIne 4 is funny but out of place. I would change stanza one and get rid of the rhyme. Lines 6/8-end are fab.
Re: Gratitude by Dovina	Caducus 213.122.70.19	3-Jul-05/1:27 AM
Rockmage - this isnt BAAAADDDDDD. It really isn't. Would you please be a gentlemen and say why you think so? I admit the language is heavy handed in parts but like me she's trying to express herself and pick subjects hardly tackled. I see a lot of beauty in the stuff you write and thats the real you not this pseudonym(s) of yours. Worth a 6 at least.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	3-Jul-05/9:27 AM
terrible
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	3-Jul-05/11:20 AM
Death as an orgasm'ng woman. That's what I got. Have trouble with the sutured woodwind though.
Re: Daytime TV by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	3-Jul-05/11:24 AM
I think it's a great grouping.