Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	Dovina 12.72.22.255	30-Aug-05/11:11 AM
Oh my goodness! Belay that, I feel I have no goodness. What a romp! I want to ask if it's fiction, but won't.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.22.255	30-Aug-05/11:21 AM
It seems at first that an Ode could not also be a Pimple. It seems also that wit should be with. Then, "note" seems it should be a written note following "runes." If it's a musical note, then "dual" could better be "tied eighth notes" and "tripple" "triplets," and "peak" "crescendo." I'd drop "that" from "that I can control." I think it is neither ode nor pimple, but free verse. The first verse is good.
Re: Letters to Silence by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.22.255	30-Aug-05/11:28 AM
Yep, it's hard to keep silent. I can feel it! Mostly well said.
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	30-Aug-05/11:42 AM
A) Points for "groovy" B) not "naughty bits" instead "bubbies" C) Nice switch at the end
Re: Geraldine Florentine, MD by T. Jonathron Remp	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	30-Aug-05/11:44 AM
you nut.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	30-Aug-05/11:49 AM
So, how is that big white Wookie of a father of yours? Aint seen'im around lately.
Re: Comment Ranker (Favorites) by MacFrantic	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.159.221.190	30-Aug-05/3:41 PM
For months now I've been longing for a compendium of your comments, so when this gem oozed its way onto the Most Recent list I could scarcely contain my delight. Each painstakingly selected comment had me doubled up in fits of laughter. It's as if you've trawled through every comment you've ever written, and only chosen the ones that were really, really funny! You should get this published! Have you tried poetry.com?
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.159.221.190	30-Aug-05/3:44 PM
How dare you sully us with the lurid details of your repulsive love life? You're a disgusting harlot who knows no shame. Get off this site. -0-
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:23 PM
sexual outer space is horrible. It brings to mind that Sublime song "Date Rape"... I think it could be shortened and made a little less detailed to be more effective.
Re: Geraldine Florentine, MD by T. Jonathron Remp	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:25 PM
Super. reminds me of early Beck
Re: Present, tense by INTRANSIT	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:28 PM
Not your best work, but I like it. Hey, I'm back...isn't everyone glad!
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:33 PM
the end saved it.
Re: Faint Heart by TLRufener	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:36 PM
Is this about having a heart attack? Shorten it to about half the length and you might have something.
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:42 PM
yeah, what the ohers said.
Re: matrimonal enemy by hendrimike	hendrimike 70.17.52.234	30-Aug-05/6:46 PM
made subtle changes
Re: The Trees in Spring (edit) by Sasha	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:46 PM
Your original work is usually pretty good, and this is no exception, but your stuff always seems so pretentious. I guess it's just the way you write...carry on.
Re: matrimonal enemy by hendrimike	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:55 PM
I agree that the nickel sounds a bit odd. Maybe you could say coin...or put your change in the machine...maybe that would work..otherwise pretty good overall... There's a couple of places that are a little inconsistent and could be a problem if you put it to music...but maybe not...depending on what kind of a song you want it to be.
Re: Quevedo: Psalm by Sasha	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/6:57 PM
Pretty and a good translation but once again, I just don't think you should get votes for a translation. I stand by it and don't vote.
Re: fastbreaker by calliope	wilco 66.61.101.130	30-Aug-05/7:00 PM
what?
Re: Summer Song by wilco	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	30-Aug-05/10:09 PM
A few suggestions: put the apostrohe before the s in "summers'"; say more about the girl - what does she look like?; use the word "linger" only once, twice makes me not listen. What I love: "All of the cars, black as they pass by your house"; "Satellites ride across the heavens like stars". 8.7