Re: Summer Song by wilco	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	30-Aug-05/10:10 PM
oops - i mispelled "apostrophe" - it still looks wrong?
Re: Song of the cannonball ( a drinking song) by INTRANSIT	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	30-Aug-05/10:11 PM
I'll kis YOU with a powder burn! What a great line. You had me at "drinking song".
Re: 8/29 by cronus	jessicazee 64.12.116.135	31-Aug-05/12:10 AM
You need a more painful title. 9
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	zodiac 212.118.19.76	31-Aug-05/5:10 AM
Why does the first line have a question mark after it? Would you say you've learned all the things there are to learn in life now? The reason I'm asking is because fifteen minutes before you wrote this poem, you could have written a poem saying Some things I've learned: 2 + 2 = 4, Translation always works, The sky's always blue etc, and been just as wrong. In fact, I imagine you writing this exact same poem every fifteen minutes for the rest of your life and always being exactly the same amount wrong. Wouldn't that be something? What do you think about that?
Re: Present, tense by INTRANSIT	zodiac 212.118.19.76	31-Aug-05/5:32 AM
I'm betting you live in a hurricane path, and the windows are now a stained glass driveway. Am I close?
Re: Katrina by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	31-Aug-05/6:17 AM
I like the first and second stanzas. 3 needs its lines shuffled and delete the -the- in the fourth, this will connect the two. take a rasp to the english and the end seems to be dangling, unfinished, as if suddenly washed away. ees goot.
Re: Summer Song by wilco	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	31-Aug-05/6:21 AM
Snoop out the pimply parts and it'll roll.
Re: Intrusion by Sasha	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	31-Aug-05/8:18 AM
I can't compete with this. But I'll try.
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	31-Aug-05/8:19 AM
spelling or comma in the last line.
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	31-Aug-05/8:20 AM
what the?
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.159.221.190	31-Aug-05/8:41 AM
I have just been contacted by the FBI and they informed me of the changes you made to your (once lewd) poeme. You'll be pleased to know they've accepted the rewording and will not be pursuing the matter any further. Kind regards, -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/9:18 AM
Really sweet of you guys. Really.
Re: Dying breed by INTRANSIT	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/9:32 AM
I was going to say this is one of the best things I've read in a while but then I noticed you misspelled "bridges" and now it's all just rubbish. So now I have no choice but to reduce your score to a measly -10-
Re: matrimonal enemy by hendrimike	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/9:43 AM
I don't like the word "Mini-van" in any poem.
Re: Song of the cannonball ( a drinking song) by INTRANSIT	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/9:53 AM
Somewhere between Monty Python and Sponge Bob Square Pants. In some of the lines the cannon ball seems to reveal his gay side don't ya think. The "Aye!" made me laugh out loud and for that a -10-
Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	31-Aug-05/9:59 AM
Good and memorable poem
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/10:07 AM
Weee! Look at me. I'm the new guy (well sorta new). Can I join your gang. Huh, huh, can I, can I? You all seem like the coolest... Oh shoot was I suppose to make a comment related to the poem? Oh well. So whats up...
Re: Intrusion by Sasha	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/10:16 AM
For using the sentence "Wrapped tight as a huge boa round his wood" without refering to a penis I give you -10-
Re: Dying breed by INTRANSIT	Bethy 24.222.32.250	31-Aug-05/10:16 AM
Excellent! a standing ovation! *10* :) Bethy
Re: Comment Ranker (Favorites) by MacFrantic	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	31-Aug-05/10:20 AM
Umm... Nevermind.