Why does the first line have a question mark after it? Would you say you've learned all the things there are to learn in life now? The reason I'm asking is because fifteen minutes before you wrote this poem, you could have written a poem saying Some things I've learned: 2 + 2 = 4, Translation always works, The sky's always blue etc, and been just as wrong. In fact, I imagine you writing this exact same poem every fifteen minutes for the rest of your life and always being exactly the same amount wrong. Wouldn't that be something? What do you think about that?

I'm betting you live in a hurricane path, and the windows are now a stained glass driveway. Am I close?

I like the first and second stanzas. 3 needs its lines shuffled and delete the -the- in the fourth, this will connect the two. take a rasp to the english and the end seems to be dangling, unfinished, as if suddenly washed away. ees goot.

Snoop out the pimply parts and it'll roll.

I have just been contacted by the FBI and they informed me of the changes you made to your (once lewd) poeme. You'll be pleased to know they've accepted the rewording and will not be pursuing the matter any further. Kind regards, -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

Really sweet of you guys. Really.

Umm... Nevermind.

oops - i mispelled "apostrophe" - it still looks wrong?

I'll kis YOU with a powder burn! What a great line. You had me at "drinking song".

You need a more painful title. 9

Good and memorable poem

Weee! Look at me. I'm the new guy (well sorta new). Can I join your gang. Huh, huh, can I, can I? You all seem like the coolest... Oh shoot was I suppose to make a comment related to the poem? Oh well. So whats up...

For using the sentence "Wrapped tight as a huge boa round his wood" without refering to a penis I give you -10-

Excellent! a standing ovation! *10* :) Bethy

I can't compete with this. But I'll try.

spelling or comma in the last line.

what the?

I was going to say this is one of the best things I've read in a while but then I noticed you misspelled "bridges" and now it's all just rubbish. So now I have no choice but to reduce your score to a measly -10-

I don't like the word "Mini-van" in any poem.

Somewhere between Monty Python and Sponge Bob Square Pants. In some of the lines the cannon ball seems to reveal his gay side don't ya think. The "Aye!" made me laugh out loud and for that a -10-