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Present, tense (Free verse) by INTRANSIT
I had built a beautiful home right down to its stained glass windows.

Up the ladder: Chodeling on my knees
Down the ladder: Beauty Sleep

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.714286
Weighted score: 5.192101
Overall Rank: 4646
Posted: August 29, 2005 3:12 PM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2005 5:00 AM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 | 29-Aug-05/7:30 PM | Reply
what? Say again.
[8] Dovina @ 12.72.22.255 > Dovina | 30-Aug-05/11:05 AM | Reply
Okay, kinda funny or sad, could be really grotesque.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.198 > Dovina | 30-Aug-05/11:34 AM | Reply
sposa be sad.
[4] nentwined @ 68.232.253.122 | 30-Aug-05/12:52 AM | Reply
hm.

why the apostrophe on its?

I'm seeing this as a puzzle, but I don't see the first bit of string to unravel.

I need something more to make it tense, and I'd rather it actually be in present tense.

Or I'm missing the cosmic joke, which would not be that unusual...
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.198 > nentwined | 30-Aug-05/5:01 AM | Reply
Yeah. I knew there was something that needed changing to make this work. the house is now a home.
[7] wilco @ 66.61.101.130 | 30-Aug-05/6:28 PM | Reply
Not your best work, but I like it.

Hey, I'm back...isn't everyone glad!
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.76 | 31-Aug-05/5:32 AM | Reply
I'm betting you live in a hurricane path, and the windows are now a stained glass driveway. Am I close?
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.198 > zodiac | 31-Aug-05/6:09 AM | Reply
Erm, no. But that's funny! And again I'm close to what I want to say here. damn.
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