Present, tense

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Aug 2005 · Edited 30 Aug 2005 · 8 comments

I had built a beautiful home right down to its stained glass windows.

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8 comments

[8] Dovina 29-Aug-05/7:30 PM Reply

what? Say again.

[8] Dovina › Dovina 30-Aug-05/11:05 AM Reply

Okay, kinda funny or sad, could be really grotesque.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › Dovina 30-Aug-05/11:34 AM Reply

sposa be sad.

[4] nentwined 30-Aug-05/12:52 AM Reply

hm.

why the apostrophe on its?

I'm seeing this as a puzzle, but I don't see the first bit of string to unravel.

I need something more to make it tense, and I'd rather it actually be in present tense.

Or I'm missing the cosmic joke, which would not be that unusual...

[n/a] INTRANSIT › nentwined 30-Aug-05/5:01 AM Reply

Yeah. I knew there was something that needed changing to make this work. the house is now a home.

[7] wilco 30-Aug-05/6:28 PM Reply

Not your best work, but I like it.

Hey, I'm back...isn't everyone glad!

[8] zodiac 31-Aug-05/5:32 AM Reply

I'm betting you live in a hurricane path, and the windows are now a stained glass driveway. Am I close?

[n/a] INTRANSIT › zodiac 31-Aug-05/6:09 AM Reply

Erm, no. But that's funny! And again I'm close to what I want to say here. damn.