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Hard Month

by wlshepherd

Member since 2002 · Posted 31 Jan 2004 · 2 comments

Special season between shadow and shade, You swallow dark colour, sound, Thick air swarming beneath. Some snow cold bird could bring the night, Then bad sky Like that day the rain dog shivered. You thought she'd use her love as if spring was almost full, flowers through. Only gentle, and never more so.

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[7] NanceXToo 31-Jan-04/11:30 AM Reply
It does seem a little disjointed. But I kinda like it. At first, "Some snow cold bird" sounded a little awkward to me. I dunno, it could probably be fixed just by adding a hypen (snow-cold). I really like the line "Like that day the rain dog shivered."
[1] Stephen Robins 16-Feb-05/5:42 AM Reply

This is appalling. To think of the rain dog shivering and the some snow cold bird, really evokes massive feelings of having just gargled with Sperm.