| Re: Katrina by jessicazee |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/10:40 AM |
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good poem, kinda hangs at the end, but good *8* :) Bethy
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| Re: Intrusion by Sasha |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/10:43 AM |
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third last line...awesome!!... great words...:) Bethy
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| Re: matrimonal enemy by hendrimike |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/10:48 AM |
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by the time I read to the end of this poem/lyric, I was singing it...now it will be in my head all day...lol excellent emotions...:) Bethy *8*
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| Re: Summer Song by wilco |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/11:10 AM |
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good lyrics... *8* :) Bethy
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| Re: Song of the cannonball ( a drinking song) by INTRANSIT |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/11:14 AM |
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this is fun! yep a drinking song fer sure...:) Bethy
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| Re: Geraldine Florentine, MD by T. Jonathron Remp |
Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/11:16 AM |
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These words are sooooo good, may I copy and tape it to my fridge...:) Bethy
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Bethy 24.222.32.250 |
31-Aug-05/11:21 AM |
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the sharpest dullest blade...my favorite line in a very long time...:) Bethy
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| Re: Geraldine Florentine, MD by T. Jonathron Remp |
Sasha 68.49.8.49 |
31-Aug-05/12:34 PM |
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| Re: The Blood Of Life by eros |
Bethy 24.222.32.225 |
31-Aug-05/1:31 PM |
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| Re: Fellowship Of The Sun by eros |
Bethy 24.222.32.225 |
31-Aug-05/1:34 PM |
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You've taken my breath away...:) Bethy
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.159.221.190 |
31-Aug-05/2:26 PM |
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public class Nentwined extends Rockmage implements UnbelievablyAppalling
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| Re: Out of a White Hole by ALChemy |
Sasha 68.49.8.49 |
31-Aug-05/3:15 PM |
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I think you extended the metaphor beyond its shelf-life. It feels cluttered by abstractions to fill in the places where imagination fails. Other than that good.
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| Re: Summer Song by wilco |
Sasha 68.49.8.49 |
31-Aug-05/3:42 PM |
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The lines seem too long for the subject matter they contain
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| Re: Falling by D. $ Fontera |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67 |
1-Sep-05/8:55 AM |
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Quit -the- din, i think would be better. Otherwise, I hope to see this in the top twenty soon.
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T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185 |
1-Sep-05/8:56 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185 |
1-Sep-05/8:57 AM |
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A comical glimpse into the life of a sad, sad individual
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| Re: Comment Ranker (Favorites) by MacFrantic |
T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185 |
1-Sep-05/9:25 AM |
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[Comment Ranker (Favorites) by MacFrantic]
"This poem makes me want to impregnate your daughter, then impregnate the resulting child, and continue that trend for twelve hundred iterations resulting in a child so twisted and recursive in form as to be worthy of being smeared across your face. *4*"
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| Re: I've often been known to make people laugh by T. Jonathron Remp |
patty t 70.30.211.173 |
1-Sep-05/10:29 AM |
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very funny.
are all those 'i cans' really necessary?
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| Re: Katrina by jessicazee |
wilco 66.61.101.130 |
1-Sep-05/5:56 PM |
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I'd lose the fifth stanza. We don't need a Zeppelin reference. Lose the The in the fourth stanza and your pretty good.
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| Re: The Right Thing To Do by Bethy |
wilco 66.61.101.130 |
1-Sep-05/6:02 PM |
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okay, but whats the point.
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