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Faint Heart (Free verse) by TLRufener
The room is spinning I’m feeling faint I only hope that It’s not too late My heart is pounding Against my ribs The pain is bad I hope it doesn’t give The world is loosing It’s hold on me My strength is failing It’s hard to breathe My mind is a blur Sound is fading fast The light is leaving It doesn’t seem to last My eyes are closing My feeling is gone I can’t leave I’m not done yet The pain is growing I start to cry The fear is rising I don’t want to die I feel so cold They say I’m so warm How can that be My mind is torn They ask me questions I can barely speak I have lost control I’m so weak My hear is slowing My eyes begin to close If I’ll wake up Nobody knows

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.6666667
Weighted score: 4.8410625
Overall Rank: 10710
Posted: August 29, 2005 10:51 AM PDT; Last modified: August 29, 2005 10:51 AM PDT
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[4] wilco @ 66.61.101.130 | 30-Aug-05/6:36 PM | Reply
Is this about having a heart attack? Shorten it to about half the length and you might have something.
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