Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 79.78.94.70	16-Sep-08/3:28 PM
Oil my bald cheeks.
Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 79.78.94.70	16-Sep-08/3:36 PM
It always amuses me when, in between thinking about shoes, women sometimes find time to write poetry. Does the W stand for White? If so, isn't that racist?
Re: The state of things... by hobojo	ThePariahDog 216.242.79.130	24-Sep-08/6:05 PM
sacrifice comes one way or the other. taxation permits representation by either the pallbearers of old regimes or the vanguard of the new
Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	ThePariahDog 216.242.79.130	24-Sep-08/6:59 PM
the meeting seems random enough, yet the parameters are established. equal parts hunter and hunted
Re: Bottled Wisdom by Bethy	T. Jonathron Remp 128.83.157.120	26-Sep-08/12:05 PM
This is an instruction manual to Life.
Re: Ashes Of Me by Tyler J. Mancini	T. Jonathron Remp 128.83.157.120	26-Sep-08/2:45 PM
can we use this at our wedding
Re: Babe TRUTH by T. Jonathron Remp	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:02 PM
Rich with wisdom indeed! Nature only wants you to replenish its wonders. Too bad everyone doesn't see it this way. One of my favs for sure!
Re: .: night owl (2) by elementalidad	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:15 PM
panic! well done
Re: night owl (3) by elementalidad	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:17 PM
get busy then...can't wait to see more
Re: freedom for all by ThePariahDog	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:18 PM
emotional, awakening, real
Re: The state of things... by hobojo	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:20 PM
Most are not willing...reality in words...wonderful
Re: night owl (4) by elementalidad	elementalidad 190.154.63.211	26-Sep-08/5:25 PM
bethy, your comment sparked me. thanks.
Re: Pause by Nepanthe	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:27 PM
This is interesting...I just wrote a poem about a message in a bottle. This is the first I viewed your poem. Have you ever looked in the eyes of our elderly? It is amazing what you can see. Perhaps we all should pause...and say "Hello in there" (a quote from John Prine's song called, "Hello in There") Great poem... :) Bethy
Re: night owl (4) by elementalidad	Bethy 165.154.46.167	26-Sep-08/5:33 PM
very good...I have never really been a big fan of Senryu, however, you make it easy to like.
Re: Bottled Wisdom by Bethy	Celticai 121.222.109.48	27-Sep-08/9:23 PM
This poem resonated for me.. I particularly enjoyed the tempo that you have conveyed with your spacing of the text as it conveys the highs and lows of life just as much as the words you have chosen do!
Re: Whispers among me by celticskatermatt1	Celticai 121.222.109.48	27-Sep-08/9:26 PM
Celtic.. I really enjoyed your poem as it's resonance chimed a similar chord within me. "The Fire" kindling your toes... just a breath of life, heat, flame, desire...enough to keep you from jumping over the edge.
Re: freedom for all by ThePariahDog	Celticai 121.222.109.48	28-Sep-08/5:04 PM
your use of similes and metaphors are very poignant!
Re: night owl (4) by elementalidad	Dovina 68.183.245.65	28-Sep-08/7:45 PM
you could leave out - but. Makes it more open, seems
Re: night owl (4) by elementalidad	elementalidad 190.154.63.211	29-Sep-08/6:38 AM
i suppose i could nip the but, however I think I'd have to either change the tense of "quietly hates" accordingly or insert a forced pause (-) after prays to make sense in english, no? what do you think? lay man prays- quietly hates the next day lay man prays quietly hating the next day
Re: night owl (5) by elementalidad	Bethy 165.154.46.224	29-Sep-08/10:14 AM
oh the sweet sound of peace... :)