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Ashes Of Me (Free verse) by Tyler J. Mancini Ashes in the tray.
Ashes on the floor.
Ashes in the way,
I left you at the door.
Ashes on mind.
Ashes all the time.
Ashes are just fine,
You were once been mine.
Ashes at the start.
Ashes in my heart.
Ashes leave me here,
Staring in the mirror.
Ashes...
Ashes...
Once breathing.
Once something.
Ashes...
Ashes...
Once breathing.
Now nothing.
Up the ladder:
I Am A Crap Me
Down the ladder:
Third person.
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Posted: July 25, 2008 12:09 AM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2008 12:09 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.642391 Overall Rank: 12364 Comments:
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T. Jonathron Remp @ 75.50.57.163
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25-Jul-08/12:11 AM
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GOD YOU SUCK WHO THE FUCK DO YOU THINK YOU ARE I LIKED IT A LOT
"You were once been mine."
No... no. 'You had once been mine." Now if we could just make something worth reading out of this idea of ashes? Something that doesn't make me think an eleven year old girl wrote it. Ashes, ashes, and we all fall DOWN! Two. And that's only because there's something that can be done with the concept, but nothing can fix the failure of execution.
can we use this at our wedding
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