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Pause (Free verse) by Nepanthe
'Sir do you have the time?' 'yes' he replied, as his hand stopped in mind. It ended when I became. Like a bubble or an egg, and the word 'silence' when said. 'It's 2:02, the area code to Washington D.C.' then we looked down the street. At the scraggly looking man scrounging for bottles in the bins. Then he said... 'I put a message in a bottle once, only with time to carry it across' then he shook his head. 'I know, I just found it on the curb' 'Could you read it once again?' 'Sir, do you have the time?'

Up the ladder: Suicide Note(I Blame Me)
Down the ladder: This Poetry Thing

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.1422777
Overall Rank: 5498
Posted: September 16, 2008 4:40 PM PDT; Last modified: September 16, 2008 4:40 PM PDT
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[8] Bethy @ 165.154.46.167 | 26-Sep-08/5:27 PM | Reply
This is interesting...I just wrote a poem about a message in a bottle. This is the first I viewed your poem.
Have you ever looked in the eyes of our elderly? It is amazing what you can see. Perhaps we all should pause...and say "Hello in there" (a quote from John Prine's song called, "Hello in There")

Great poem... :) Bethy
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