Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina	Bethy 165.154.46.224	29-Sep-08/10:20 AM
Oh what now does our future hold? When we look into the eyes of the old, our parents knew and now us, not then...will we find out...who, what and when? (something from an old poem I wrote) This is perfectly wonderful Dovina.
Re: Anger by Celticai	Bethy 165.154.46.224	29-Sep-08/10:24 AM
I'd say destructive...if letting the force free...
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	Bethy 165.154.46.224	29-Sep-08/10:27 AM
perfect! I don't know what to say...I feel like I am sitting on a mountain in Peru. Thank you
Re: Anger by Celticai	Celticai 121.222.109.48	29-Sep-08/1:15 PM
Thanks Bethy... this is just one of those poems that gave me an opportunity to express how I was feeling at the time! :)
Re: About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote	some deleted user 68.120.225.169	29-Sep-08/6:10 PM
You depraved hobo; I've been trying to get a hold of you...
Re: About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote	some deleted user 68.120.225.169	29-Sep-08/6:18 PM
Dear Supreme Dreamer (or whatever the fuck your name is), I've had immeasurable difficulty maintaining a 'positive attitude' in these dire times. If anyone's to help, it'd be you! email me. tht19832000@yahoo.com
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	some deleted user 68.120.225.169	29-Sep-08/6:26 PM
I'd far sooner kill the likes of you all before I'd kill myself. I've read something that rings similiar to this; in Chuck Palahniuk's (sp?) novel 'Choke'. Apparently, they're making it into a full-length feature film. Dude, contact me...immediately.
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	some deleted user 68.120.225.169	29-Sep-08/6:27 PM
tht19832000@yahoo.com
Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina	Celticai 124.186.170.98	1-Oct-08/3:38 PM
Dovina.. my hubby is a train nut.. I love this! Many of the heritage railways would love a copy of this. Congratulations.. it conveys the melancholy and the hope.
Re: Lover by Bethy	Celticai 124.186.170.98	1-Oct-08/3:40 PM
An aching refrain.. Bethy did you mean to use wisp or whispered in the fifth line? Just wondered if the use of present tense was purposeful?
Re: Can you beLIEve? by T. Jonathron Remp	Celticai 124.186.170.98	1-Oct-08/3:43 PM
A political politiked commentary on today and the presidential campaign... your word choices create an interesting fluidity to the reading.
Re: unheeded by Skamper	Celticai 124.186.170.98	1-Oct-08/3:44 PM
Made me think of my teenage years and smoking through the bathroom window!
Re: Beauty? by Celticai	Bethy 165.154.46.13	2-Oct-08/4:44 AM
The truth about life in the (game)name of beauty. Beauty in is the garden surrounded by potatoes, string beans, corn and flowers. Beauty is deeper than the ground in earth on your skin when you grow things to feed your children. Beauty is inspiring, living in the moment, playing in the leaves, and having chicken nuggets and kraft dinner by candle light with your son and daughter. Beauty is when you read a poem and know that there is hope, happiness, sadness, reality and you feel what the author has written. So, you hold on to that and know there is beauty in their soul. You are an amazing writer. You inspire me. Bethy :)
Re: unheeded by Skamper	Bethy 165.154.46.13	2-Oct-08/5:02 AM
My father threw a glass of water at me threw my bedroom window while I was enjoying a smoke with my dearest friend. He was a fireman at one time in his life. So, at the supper table that night, my mom got home from work, ask my father how his day was, and his reply is as follows, "I put a fire out in Bethy's bedroom today. I think she and Edna will be fine, I think they were scared though, thank god I was home at the time." lol
Re: Beauty? by Celticai	Dovina 208.127.228.23	5-Oct-08/1:59 PM
Why is primping fake. Too many women take this absurd approach; they go out looking like boys. My soul is not even approachable if my hair is a rat's nest and my lips look like Tom McCain's.
Re: Lover by Bethy	Dovina 208.127.228.23	5-Oct-08/2:03 PM
wow, what a dream! Tell me how to dream this way. Or am I wrong?
Re: Beauty? by Celticai	Celticai 123.211.253.133	6-Oct-08/1:10 PM
I never said that it was fake.. it was more of a comment on the excess and cost and for what end?
Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina	darylchew 218.186.12.10	6-Oct-08/3:45 PM
lovely. anyway, do you remember me, dovina?
Re: Rails to Trails by Dovina	Ranger 86.131.54.245	6-Oct-08/4:26 PM
I like the fourth stanza, altered a bit. Especially the "servants like me" bit (no comma needed after it), because unlike the rest, which is pretty generalised, it brings the focus down to one point, one place. I don't think it wants the repeated 'to'. You could get away with using 'where' once more there - "...where boys chase rabbits/where more people/clog the freeways". Or something like that.
Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai	Ranger 86.131.54.245	6-Oct-08/4:31 PM
Sort of New Age. Are you a painter?