Re: Acoustics by oneglove	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Oct-05/8:29 AM
3rd verse is good.
Re: The cold shoulder by <~>	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Oct-05/8:40 AM
Gives new meaning to the term "Cluster fuck". First the moon now the stars is there a term for this type of sexual preference? Cosmosexual? Celestialphile? Astro-erotica? Nice juicy stuff you're writing.
Re: Remember me she said by Caducus	vulcan 80.242.8.17	27-Oct-05/9:36 AM
beautiful one
Re: Alert me by T. Jonathron Remp	zodiac 217.144.7.195	27-Oct-05/12:53 PM
Is your name really JonathRon? How odd. It's like you're a science fiction character.
Re: Tough Love by Crann Mascher	Dovina 209.247.222.84	27-Oct-05/8:16 PM
Great. But unless she has Size 12 feet, try 6" heels. And we don't need the opening remark.
Re: Alert me by T. Jonathron Remp	Dovina 209.247.222.84	27-Oct-05/8:19 PM
Logistically impossible.
Re: Remember me she said by Caducus	Dovina 209.247.222.84	27-Oct-05/8:30 PM
Very tender, especially the "honest baby" lines.
Re: An Allegory to No One by MacFrantic	Dovina 209.247.222.92	28-Oct-05/9:33 AM
How can you reveal this? And suburban conopy doesn't work for me. "Loud foreign things" does.
Re: MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears	Niphredil 192.117.121.115	28-Oct-05/9:53 AM
I would change 'Can not you taste' to the more correct 'Can you not taste'.
Re: The cold shoulder by <~>	Niphredil 192.117.121.115	28-Oct-05/10:05 AM
Lovely work.
Re: Remembrance by Caducus	Niphredil 192.117.121.115	28-Oct-05/10:10 AM
I knew I was going to read something good just from the author and title, and I wasn't disappointed. Great work :-).
Re: Remember me she said by Caducus	Niphredil 192.117.121.115	28-Oct-05/10:11 AM
rised = rose.
Re: when i make sculpture by ay deee	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	28-Oct-05/3:53 PM
rogue -do- in the fourth.
Re: Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT	Dovina 209.247.222.86	28-Oct-05/6:21 PM
Aren't you too old for this. Cutting paper dolls can at least be dignified with the name, origami. Thrusting the belly forward to music of The Rubber Band does have an unknotting.
Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation	zodiac 212.118.19.91	29-Oct-05/2:23 AM
Anne Frank, with an E. Drop ever instance of 'each other' or 'one another'.
Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation	zodiac 212.118.19.91	29-Oct-05/2:24 AM
PS-Nice self-voting. You must be basking in all your made-up greatness.
Re: Poetry is where you find it by INTRANSIT	zodiac 212.118.19.91	29-Oct-05/2:26 AM
I like it. I don't know why you switch hands.
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 172.212.241.153	29-Oct-05/3:09 AM
comments lost.
Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	29-Oct-05/6:29 AM
"broadband subterranean tunnels" perfect.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	29-Oct-05/6:33 AM
I think you just blew my doors off.