good neat humour, i like your message. have u ever been on the other side.............

Nice tone. I appreciate the subtle humor.

This is funny. Really.

The moon may well enjoy it. I think the use of 2, w/, 4, youv'e, and all the smily faces detract. As a tongue-in-cheek this is good, so I'm assuming good.

huh? :)

cute, but doesn't manage to climb beyond that for me.

wow.

Makes me think of Bush.

boring.

good pustule of a pimple.

This has ome nice images, and a decent sentiment, but some of it is just too hackneyed. Punctuation would definitely help the reader follow what is written, but I don't know if that would really help the poem.

Hmm. Periods, maybe. But without them it reads more like a child. Since it was a childs memory, this is ok by me. Periods would make it seem written more maturely, maybe too intently. Sorry I can't reach both ends of my shoelace this eve.

"Screams of mans in end of their times" says it all.

"He taught she is ugly, unworthy, dumb. Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad

"When I see you next I will take you into my arms And never let go again" kidnap?

They saw his light. That star; he smiles, he’s going home Father calls That star, he smiles, “I’m on my way”. Happy Kwanza

Delete or alter (shorten) the closer.

A good pimple but for a great pimple the end has to be about "Her." How about? "outweighed by You, you fat-assed, blood-sucking, faithless whore! But I will take you back, if you ask." That's a pimple '10.'

U a gynecologist, T?

just when you thaink that this is it, a train throws itself under your feet.