Re: Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	Dan garcia-Black 209.247.222.45	25-Dec-05/1:39 PM
"Screams of mans in end of their times" says it all.
Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	Dan garcia-Black 209.247.222.45	25-Dec-05/1:42 PM
"He taught she is ugly, unworthy, dumb. Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad
Re: Never Let Go Again by TLRufener	Dan garcia-Black 209.247.222.45	25-Dec-05/1:46 PM
"When I see you next I will take you into my arms And never let go again" kidnap?
Re: The Calling by PoeticXTC	Dan garcia-Black 209.247.222.45	25-Dec-05/1:49 PM
They saw his light. That star; he smiles, he’s going home Father calls That star, he smiles, “I’m on my way”. Happy Kwanza
Re: Social Rant by fubang22	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:37 PM
This is funny. Really.
Re: real fright of going home by veggiegurl	Dovina 17.255.240.138	26-Dec-05/1:42 PM
The moon may well enjoy it. I think the use of 2, w/, 4, youv'e, and all the smily faces detract. As a tongue-in-cheek this is good, so I'm assuming good.
regarding some deleted poem...	impert&ent 82.46.140.179	26-Dec-05/2:02 PM
Nice tone. I appreciate the subtle humor.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	26-Dec-05/3:28 PM
Delete or alter (shorten) the closer.
Re: Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:45 PM
huh? :)
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:46 PM
cute, but doesn't manage to climb beyond that for me.
Re: real fright of going home by veggiegurl	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:48 PM
wow.
Re: Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:50 PM
Makes me think of Bush.
Re: Paradise by TLRufener	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:51 PM
boring.
Re: Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/5:52 PM
good pustule of a pimple.
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	nentwined 64.60.192.131	26-Dec-05/6:13 PM
This has ome nice images, and a decent sentiment, but some of it is just too hackneyed. Punctuation would definitely help the reader follow what is written, but I don't know if that would really help the poem.
Re: why? by nentwined	Dan garcia-Black 71.129.157.173	26-Dec-05/7:18 PM
A good pimple but for a great pimple the end has to be about "Her." How about? "outweighed by You, you fat-assed, blood-sucking, faithless whore! But I will take you back, if you ask." That's a pimple '10.'
Re: Hoi Polloi by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 71.129.157.173	26-Dec-05/7:22 PM
U a gynecologist, T?
Re: why? by nentwined	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	26-Dec-05/7:46 PM
just when you thaink that this is it, a train throws itself under your feet.
Re: Train of Thought by Sisterwolf	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	26-Dec-05/8:03 PM
Hmm. Periods, maybe. But without them it reads more like a child. Since it was a childs memory, this is ok by me. Periods would make it seem written more maturely, maybe too intently. Sorry I can't reach both ends of my shoelace this eve.
regarding some deleted poem...	crazyknight 202.83.45.163	26-Dec-05/8:48 PM
good neat humour, i like your message. have u ever been on the other side.............