Re: Memories of modernism by madamefrufru	Dovina 70.38.78.229	27-Jun-06/5:54 PM
Leaving me wondering whether it's a painting or a crash is this poem's greatest value. It leans toward a painting, but leaves just enough holes in that view to make me ask whether you are understating something more. I'd like to see it lean the other way.
Re: Lovers east of the Coombe by Caducus	Ranger 81.152.176.220	28-Jun-06/2:22 PM
Great use of the limerick format for something beautiful. I think Dovina's got a point regarding the logic in here - the bough itself doesn't blow away. You could easily get round it by making that line refer to the leaves, perhaps "A bough's gold bloom". This is pretty damn gorgeous though.
Re: Late Break by MacFrantic	Ranger 81.152.176.220	28-Jun-06/2:29 PM
Other than 'deconstruct' this is excellent. Very tidy indeed.
Re: Doctoring Stigmata by thepinkbunnyofdoom	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	29-Jun-06/12:02 AM
A good poetry prose, and a good concept. The construction and verse is very well done.
Re: watch by the indign	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	29-Jun-06/12:07 AM
A very good write. Good construction, and rhyme. Needs some captializing on a few words, otherwise, an excellent write.
Re: A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	29-Jun-06/4:32 AM
An excellent write. Good construction and rhyme. A godo concept that those in war would understand and know the depths of emotions and feeling here. Excellent write. (Thumbs Up)
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 86.141.200.125	29-Jun-06/7:03 AM
Welcome to poemranker. I would suggest you make your welcome easier by considering the following. 1) All poetry posted on poemranker is copyrighted. I think the copyright message you have posted is pompous and patronizing. PS - the standard of your poetry is nothing to get excited about. Get a life.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 17.255.240.6	29-Jun-06/11:15 AM
Then take your life elsewhere!
Re: COCK by Stephen Robins	Dovina 17.255.240.6	29-Jun-06/11:18 AM
You withered old has-been inadequate die-hard.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.59.63	30-Jun-06/12:26 AM
Ah, fantastic. We appear to have lost yet another new user. Brilliant. And we wonder why poemranker's in demise...
Re: COCK by Stephen Robins	Ranger 86.131.59.63	30-Jun-06/12:38 AM
Sounds pretty legendary to me.
Re: moving on by Jigg	Ranger 86.131.59.63	30-Jun-06/12:43 AM
Typo line 6 - 'were', I think you mean. But the grammar isn't very user-friendly there so it could be that you meant 'where'. Not very clear though. It's pretty much all over the place here, things don't follow too logically. But then I suppose that's not surprising given stanza one. Fair enough, I guess. 'Back of head met brick' is great, but it would have cracked me up if it had been 'back of head met Chewbacca'.
regarding some deleted poem...	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/2:52 AM
I said nothing wrong to anyone, I was not rude to anyone. But a certain person had to leave a very rude remark, same as Dovina has left here. I am not only a Published poet, but I also have a lot of friends who are poets as well, and I was going to invite them here, as it did look like a nice place, but found I was wrong. I am not angry at anyone here. Because some people just do not know any better. I believe in what Jesus once said, " Forgive them, for they know not what they do." I left the so-called-poem message because I do have a life, and I am sincerely sorry that the guilty person does not, or they would not have been so unjustly rude. Some people are so miserable in their own life, they just have to cut another down to make themselves feel good about themself. That is a pitty too. I just feel sorry for them. I would never invite any of my friends to a place where they would be treated so unjustly and unkind. You not only lost out on a lot of postings per day, but the chance also of aquiring a whole lot more members who would have been very active in this group. I have tried to unjoin as it so said to do, but for some reason it did not work. I would prefer not to be a member of a group where others are allowed to be so rude and critical for no reason at all.
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.36.154	30-Jun-06/6:36 AM
This starts out really great, like a poem that would move me. But when I get to "But never stray, Never bleed alone," the magic stops. How do you not bleed alone unless your cuts are intentional and in company of someone? The last three lines are good. Put something catchy between the good start and the good ending and this could be really good.
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Jun-06/7:33 AM
A giant globule of spittle or the moist lips of an accountant attending an course on the new Sarbane-Oxley Rules.
regarding some deleted poem...	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/7:51 AM
As for the poems of mine I posted first before making any comments, I deleted because of the criticism against me. Had it been in regards to my poem alone, then that would have been fine, as I have critics who do this for me anyhow. A good critic does not attack the person, but criticizes in a constructive way. And good constructive criticism is helpful to the poet. And why are you attacking me, I did nothing wrong to you or to anyone here. All my poems are legally copyrighted, and no other copyright can over ride them, for legal reasons, that was the reason for the clause at the bottom, not to offend anyone. And anyone knowing about legal copyrights would know that another copyright would over ride the first copyright, if it is a legal copyright. Also, anyone linking back to the page it is on, could possibly bring new members. That is the only two reasons for it. And I never called anyone here a sour head, as you are accusing me of, and I never accused everyone. I just find it not right that anyone would allow someone to attack another member, and now you make two who have. I was not attacking anyone, I just left a message for the one who attacked me telling them I do have a life, and there was no anger on my part, I honestly felt sorry for them. And there is no link to contact the management via the home page. I did not find that until after I sent in as a suggestion, as there is one there I found, and like I said, it was after I sent it. Are all new members suppose to know their way around right off? And I do not mind an honest opinion of my poems, I have no problem with that. But one does not have to be rude to the person in doing so. And if you do not want to try and do your best to follow in the steps of Jesus, then that is your choice. No one is perfect, and I am not either, nor do I claim to be. And I do have a life, and I do have many friends, and that is the richness of my life. And if you do not want that in your life, again it is your choice. I am not going to judge you on your choices in life, nor anyone else for that matter. And I agree with Ranger, who said, "Ah, fantastic. We appear to have lost yet another new user. Brilliant. And we wonder why poemranker's in demise..." Lost yet another new user? Well, no wonder you are losing new members. I am sorry that you feel you have to attack me as well, when I never did anything or say anything to you at all. Is the manager of this group not around to see what is going on? No wonder you are losing New members. Why don't you get to know someone before you judge them so unfairly and rude to them. I am not angry at you, I just do not understand why you or anyone would want to attack anyone for no reason. Other than what I said earlier, and that only goes along with some other poems I have read here, that others agreed with, only I just came out and said it in plain English. And that was only in reference to the one who do that. It kind of goes along with, "The guilty dog barks first." I never barked first here. May peace and love walk with you each step you take in your life. And I sincerely mean that.
regarding some deleted poem...	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/8:14 AM
By the way, I will be deleting this poem later. There is no sense in continuing with this conversation. You know, my father fought for freedom, and he is not even cold in the ground. Why is that when someone like this dies in a family, others have to attack the dead persons family also? As if they have not lost enough already. As I heard my father say once, " I fight for your freedom, and your freedom of speech, but not so you can go and speak unjustly and rude to others." My father did not die so people could be rude to others.
Re: only you by celticskatermatt1	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/8:27 AM
What a lovely heartfelt tribute to a loved one. Good construction and rhyme. An excellent write. (Thumbs up) May I make a suggestion? And no ill intent meant here. Capitalize and commas. capitalize the first word of the beginning of each verse, a comma after the first verse, a period after the second verse, etc. And capitalize your i's, as in (I close my eyes) and ill wake up (I'll) Still an excellent write. (A wink and a smile at you.)
Re: Luke Hanney's 43rd Dream by lukehanney	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/8:33 AM
I love this one. I love the humor in it also. An excellent write well done. (Thumbs up)
Re: comfort by the indign	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	30-Jun-06/8:42 AM
This is pretty good. I would also like it if you'd use upper case letter whereever necessary. I like the theme you chose and how you've presented it.