regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/1:29 PM
An appealing idea, but I think it could be better without the sound of bitterness. It has a didactic tone that tries to push the reader into a certain position. Why 33 coins, rather than the original 30?
Re: ME AGAIN by oldschool	cpill 85.178.227.75	12-Jul-06/2:50 PM
Thats some funny sh!t
Re: Today could be the last day by cpill	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/4:28 PM
It was not the last day of your life, but could have been. But how were you to know? I believe you mean "through," not "though." "Whims . . ." is a line that be scratched, I think. Otherwise good. But I think some hint would be in order as to why the narrator thinks it could be the last day.
Re: up upon by the indign	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/8:18 PM
A nice fancy. Dreamy.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 219.93.174.102	13-Jul-06/4:47 AM
It is so pathetic to see that you managed to get only three votes over a period of three days.... Are we the only ones who log onto PR? I wish there was something we could do about it.
regarding some deleted poem...	amanda_dcosta 219.93.174.102	13-Jul-06/5:30 AM
It is quite interesting to see how your thoughts on the topic led you. I'm also impressed by the way Alchemy has brought about another presentation on this. Actually, apart from the 33 pieces (which is obviously a mistake), I like your poem. I esp like the phrases....shrilling in a noosed bag, whispering forgiveness, Hells pendulum creaked like Pilate’s chair, and also the last three lines.
Re: Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo	Ranger 86.140.71.123	13-Jul-06/1:57 PM
"soaring tree"..."suitor's serenade to start"..."liquid eyes and liquid grace"..."nightjade surging sea" -- you are almost certainly the sexiest person I've never seen...this puts everything I've written thus far to shame. P.S. - you didn't read my latin villanelle. It'll be your kind of thing, methinks ;-)
Re: Two Fundamentalists Playing Cribbage by MacFrantic	Ranger 86.140.71.123	13-Jul-06/1:58 PM
*falls off chair laughing*
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	Ranger 86.140.71.123	13-Jul-06/2:09 PM
Love it. Only crit is that the penultimate line seems a little short - I'd change it to "to answer all the/crackling calls". Other than that, super.
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	13-Jul-06/6:45 PM
This is a good description. If it was a metaphor for something it would be amazing but it seems to not be attached to any thing specific except a row of trees. Maybe a title like "State Park" or something would help give it more of a setting.
Re: Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	13-Jul-06/7:02 PM
It's all about the finish with the long ones and this one is orgasmic.
Re: Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo	some deleted user 64.140.228.209	14-Jul-06/12:49 AM
It's work like this that makes reading poemranker worthwhile--an absolute diamond.
Re: I hate making titles by drnick	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.23	14-Jul-06/5:47 AM
A nice scene, the trees.. the shadows... It's cool how you emphasize on a few things and make a poem out of it. It would be better with a title though.
Re: Inside You by creepshow	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.23	14-Jul-06/5:51 AM
A cry of desparation! You've brought it out well.
Re: Tribute by creepshow	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.23	14-Jul-06/5:55 AM
Sorry.... not my cup of tea.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	drnick 69.215.254.240	14-Jul-06/12:09 PM
Please stop writing about me.
Re: of Arabia by ecargo	drnick 69.215.254.240	14-Jul-06/12:19 PM
All too true is the second to last stanza. Rock the casbah.
Re: To Athena by cleverdevice	Ranger 86.137.108.79	14-Jul-06/3:09 PM
DUDE! The triumphant return! How the devil are you? Last I heard you'd arrived home from someplace in India and were residing in the cold, damp North - whatever possessed you to lurch off there? And, more importantly, are you back in the vicinity of the Shire now? Typo last line: - embrace. Good to see you back
Re: To Athena by cleverdevice	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	14-Jul-06/6:23 PM
Wonderfully worded.
Re: up upon by the indign	amanda_dcosta 202.164.140.187	14-Jul-06/6:28 PM
Cool.