| Re: 9. The Second Life by A db C |
ALChemy 71.75.188.163 |
12-Aug-06/8:53 AM |
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That'll teach you to get on a charter flight with John Denver and JFK Jr.
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| Re: How To Ride a Bicycle by Dovina |
ALChemy 71.75.188.163 |
12-Aug-06/9:02 AM |
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Kipling's "If" for bikers?
Hey you left out:
Don't let having a testicle removed stop you,
it might even be a more comfortable ride.
In honor of Lance Armstrong of course.
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| Re: The Western World by mrpresident |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/5:14 PM |
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Why can't people write anything but sappy shit about the same tired subjects?
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| Re: A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/5:33 PM |
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This looks just like some bullshit that someone would forward to my email (and I wouldn't be surprised if it was) as if this is news. I know all this shit already, and writing it in the form of emotional guilt-tripping garbage doesn't make it anything more than exactly that. 0.
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| Re: Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/5:37 PM |
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Touchy subject. Is this all you know how to write.
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| Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/5:43 PM |
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Wow, how trendy of you to be so contrversial. Homo-erotic biblical poetry may be a somewhat original topic but this is written poorly and is plain tasteless. I can only assume it is on the best list through your own efforts.
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| Re: A spectacular poem by a handsome man by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/6:09 PM |
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Not fucking bad. Entertaining. 9.
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| Re: Lost love by Mikius |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/6:18 PM |
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Too much stolen imagery. Unoriginal.
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| Re: Not for me by MacFrantic |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/6:29 PM |
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A sophisticated Shel Silverstein piece. 10.
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| Re: flow-charts by FreeFormFixation |
leonxic 70.244.48.17 |
12-Aug-06/6:30 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Ranger 81.156.73.10 |
12-Aug-06/10:00 PM |
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Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:13 AM |
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One hates to be rude, but this looks like puerile gibberish to me. Sadly I can only score it 0/10. It deserves a minus.
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Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:15 AM |
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Banal and trite. At least no spelling mistakes.
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Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:17 AM |
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This is quite amusing in spite of the shoddy grammar. Of course, the writer-hero is a dim ignorant git who cannot appreciate Milton. I assume it's autobiographical. I'll be generous and give it 6/10 as I smiled.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:21 AM |
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I forgot to mention that it is common knowledge among students of English literature that Milton's grave was famously desecrated by grave robbers. Thus, your stupidity in coming over in the first place is compounded. You would have been better advised to go an desecrate Abey Lincoln's grave - the guy who was so thick he couldn't even go the the theatre without getting killed.
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| Re: Dale Winton's Buttocks by Ya Kid K |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:24 AM |
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The first seven lines are OK. The last line is trash. Here is my revised and improved 2nd stanza for you.
Some say they are too soft.
Some say they're rather rugged.
Some say they're strangely clammy.
Especially after being buggered.
PS Who is Dale Winton?
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| Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
Edna Sweetlove 81.178.98.236 |
13-Aug-06/3:30 AM |
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| Re: 1a. Awaken by A db C |
Dovina 12.72.34.34 |
13-Aug-06/6:41 AM |
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I think the material in the paragraphs that follow the poem are more like pooetry. The poem simply tells us what the narrator thinks or feels. The other shows us in images and thereby engenders us to think about our own feelings. Here are some examples, pulled from above:
barely visible black dots became patches
shots of memory impose
melting down like old projector film
Pulling out the negatives
stained dusty brickwork
barbed bead of frost
clutching my ticking head
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Edna Sweetlove 81.178.70.5 |
13-Aug-06/5:45 PM |
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Boring garbage. Why not stay in Cambridge? And why not drown yourself in the Cam?
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Edna Sweetlove 81.178.70.5 |
13-Aug-06/5:46 PM |
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Uneducated drivel. As per usual.
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