I don't like the way "in" is shortly followed by "inside".

"brownness" is a difficult word because one doesn't know whether pronounce it "brown ness" or "browness". In fact, it was for that very reason (the consecutive occurrence of the same consonant) that the world famous magician and entertainer Paul Daniels actually changed is first name from Ted to Paul. May I suggest you replace "brownness" with "brownliness"?

This is one fucking big speed bump I just can't get past!! Only kidding, I would never play such a childish game with you. This work obviously did not take much effort but sometimes the best stuff we do is the shit that just comes off the top of our heads. This was amusing..And yes, I do love you...now don't be naughty..not in that way...Peace JB

Abuse of the humble apostrophe (or in this case, underuse) reaches new heights.

In parts a similar vein to Tintagiles stuff - that can't be bad. Lose the line about the blue collar sleeps as only we who know you know that. Ahh unless of course your pajamas have blue lapelles - but you strike me as going 'commando' when u sleep. Just don't ask me why i think these disturbing thoughts.

if you add the word no between each of the words in the title you would have written a short poem about my life.

Makes me want to hug a tree and light incense - very VERY nice Sire ! 9

Beautiful work!

Nice, in particular, the leaves as a fuse; great thought. Lots of biblical references. Richa, I don't know your work well enough to judge if it was intentional, but the dual medusa reference in relation to a shining apple tree is extremely good (as a jellyfish, or bell shape) - even if it was subconscious it's worthy of high kudos (the other reference with the many headed snakes is also good, but better if the heads are red). small nit/typo: "gleans" s/b "gleams" I like the "corn-cradle deep" without completely understanding it - can you help me with what it means?

A very good poem.

Some unique sense persuasion occuring here.

Beautiful. It feels like it needs a comma in the last line after "will". Nice, dense, allusions.

I think you should move the sign on the outside of the church to the beginning of the poem, before you reveal what the priest is doing because everything is already revealed at the end, and makes the last line feel unnecessary. I like a little social commentary poetry. I loved that the insecticide was included in the list of church "needs". You know, a lot of people overlook sexually abusive nuns. I have a friend who grew up on a reservation and he said if you got in trouble the nuns would make you sit under their desk, facing the chair (their crotch), while they scooted up and sat at their desk. He said he could still smell them. These Catholic schools they put on the reservations were funded by the state to civilize the Native people (so much for separation of church and state), yet they would solicit for contributions on Sundays "for the poor people" and my friend, a rebel and a thinker, wondered why the church wasn't putting any money into the reservation, because people there were destitute. Not that you asked, but I think it is a disgusting bit of history(?) and would work in confrontational poems like this.

*comical...

Unreadable rubbish.

Ha Ha ha!!!!! I gave this shit a zero it was at #8 on the best list and it went to #1?!!!!! Ahhhhhhh, that figures.

On a third reading, this is getting enjoyable.

Kippers in bits. A tastey piece, did you misspell Yom Kippur on purpose? I should also point out - since the holiday is like a day of attonement, there isn't much eating, let alone a feast going on (unless you are under the age of nine, or pregnant). Maybe you should pick another holiday to blow up.

Whoa

"or will gunpowder thin, run with fire." I would end at 'thin' and put 'run with fire' somewhere deeper in the poem.