SupremeDreamer
on Birthday of a dead guy by Bobjim
10 Dec 2003, 6:44 PM
Want to play some mortal kombat with me?
I like that- "cold cattle huddled together at the steering wheel",my snowballs would melt in your hand!...I lost my Grandmother this year, too.
The blue collar transition my friend. If I get there first know that I will help you get there too.
cute & clever paranoia
i can see your transcendence is inspiration! lucky I can't remember NOT being surrounded by the big black..
I knew a Cindy just like that! I kicked her off the bus!
it's a nice visual. an epic in black and white.
for some reason I see "night of the hunter" in
my mind when I read this with mitchem as the devil.
very nice. 8
Nice poem- but the title? sucks. Unfortunately I can not suggest anything better. Blessed with nine.
Not bad- a bit long and wordy though. I'd suggest shortening this a bit. Blessed with seven.
I was thinking, imagine a really selfish Thom Yorke, and it just poured out.
Haven't lost her yet thank God - but it's coming - and the thought hurts just as much.
I wouldn't know, maybe I'm just too ugly for things like this to happen to me. Even briefly. And there is too an image here! Way in here.
For sarcasm, this is pretty fun.
Caducus,
Your work is quite skillful and this piece is no exception. However, I continue to be puzzled at the amount of energy and attention directed towards criticism of the church and those who believe in the Christian God. Regardless of who authors such work the bottom line is always the same; a substitution of the author's own sense of reality for the reality they so ardently attack. Whose version of reality are you hoping the delusional and mislead "believers" embrace?....the one they glean from their own senses and experiences or the one you profess is objectively derived? But as I said, the work is quite good. -9-
Why would you ruin a great poem by injecting it with politics?
Yeah! Great use of "slut matriarch" as an alternative to "mother"!!!!111
Berrrrt.
This is good Kristy!
And what do you Know, another good one lol.