A. Nomaly
on Black Beach by Caducus
7 Jan 2004, 7:30 PM
When you became a hapless romantic I lost all interest. Without the universe all around it is nothing but a two-dimensional depiction of romance
here's a bone for your dogs.
What did you do? ya got wings. what fer?
Roll- on the green slopes. I saw horses. in my mind. no, I mean....awwwwfergetit.
First of all, I know very little about drugs, how to "do" them and what the factors are involving such. So some of this poem loses me. But that's my lack of knowledge, not your poem. Moldy crackers should go, I think. Disneys' Aladdin popped into my head. Assuming (andante) is referring to winter, I love it. Had to look up the word though. I love the fleas, wool plaugue, and scarlet clouds. Over all I think it's fine as it sits. neener neener neener.
hee hee heee
no. soldered sushi.
4 for the comments 2 for the psuedo-sonnet.
A penny is single, solitary, small, one. An excellent image to work with. Stretch the penny over your poem.
Poetry aint easy kiddo. I'd lend you my copy of "Poetry for dummies", except it is part of me, permanently.
I had it sewn under the skin of my left thigh.
Something about this screams SONNET! There's plenty of material and plenty of great lines. "...white flag still blows" gives me an image of the backsides of crashing waves from the air.
I hope this is a first draft. Pull a draught and pull in the laces on this new shoe.
Hey listen i foughted in vietnam. hey listen...goota go nowe
shut up all of you, everyone, you did a good job with this, everybody else, shut up
niiiiice, whoever gave you a 2 should burn in Heaven...it was prolly some prep that this poem was about, you have a gift dude
Leaves? I think you mean LeaDs. (May) my lips...
Compact and honest.
cleverdevice
on Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) by Don-Quixote
8 Jan 2004, 5:33 AM
Sushi is not actually raw fish, it is lightly fried in vinegar. As such, I give you -1- cos the rest of the poem is an affront to my beliefs.
way better than a 5...i tried to write something like that but it came out way worse, applause to you my good man
ok
Well, I think its smashin..
wow, that's what i thought when i read this...
igpbgh. that is all.