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Down The Hall (Pimple) by Blindpoetry
If you can hear a penny fall You can hear me down the hall When I see your face It makes my heart beat at a faster pace And its always a little gift to me But if you catch me down the hall My pulse might begin to fall So you walk down the darkening hall But you see nothing You turn around And you see me coming So you run further down the hall Away from it all You turn around You see me there You continue to run Thinking this game isn't fair Your tears blind you You cannot see You trip and fall And you run into me You look up at me ; Tears covering your face You bring your chin down But I pull it up... and say "Atleast you gave me a taste."

Up the ladder: Johnny Depp
Down the ladder: Understanding

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Posted: January 7, 2004 6:20 PM PST; Last modified: January 7, 2004 6:20 PM PST
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[n/a] INTRANSIT @ | 7-Jan-04/6:25 PM | Reply
A penny is single, solitary, small, one. An excellent image to work with. Stretch the penny over your poem.

Poetry aint easy kiddo. I'd lend you my copy of "Poetry for dummies", except it is part of me, permanently.
I had it sewn under the skin of my left thigh.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-04/6:32 PM | Reply
Um... Really, I cannot tell if thats actual "advice" or if I'm the core of a joke?

...Really, I wouldn't care for a "Poetry for Dummies" book... Obviously the person(s) who wrote that are way to "artsy fartsy" for me. (or in other terms, "Ego-maniacs") ...I'd prefer to get better "naturally" and not out of a book.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ > Blindpoetry | 7-Jan-04/6:43 PM | Reply
Truthfully, no joke intended. The falling penny is a good image to work with. And there really is a book with that name. and you can use the book AND still mature naturally. And the book is also very down to earth and will accelerate your growth. and and and and...... Or you don't have to. Ta!
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-04/6:54 PM | Reply
Ah, okay. Glad.

...Hm... I'll see about it.
..I still don't understand how book can help you - as long as you know all (or most) of the ways to write the poetry? ..*looks up at his poetry* ah - I see... dang!
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ > Blindpoetry | 7-Jan-04/7:14 PM | Reply
Well everyone has their ways of growing poetically..
but I figure aslong as one keeps reading poetry
and writes consistently progress will follow
depending on the poet.. adapt or die?
I love that saying, maybe we should
sell flags with that motto right here
at the poemranker alms store.
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ > DreamerSupreme | 7-Jan-04/7:17 PM | Reply
I agree. I also think, "why not have several tools in ones box"
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-04/7:40 PM | Reply
Like a stabbing pen & the poison pencil? :]
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ > DreamerSupreme | 7-Jan-04/7:45 PM | Reply
And if those don't work, beat it with a pipe-wrench, right?
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-04/8:11 PM | Reply
Everyone has their prefered tools,
but the voodoo rituals are a bit over the top
anything before that is upto a poets mental funpark grinder.

I prefer the airforce JUMBO wrench personally.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ > DreamerSupreme | 7-Jan-04/7:28 PM | Reply
I didn't get some of those lines.. but I was able to comprehend some that gave me a clue as to what you were talking about, and I think thats enough to give me the morale of that...? ..anywyas, thanks.
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ > Blindpoetry | 7-Jan-04/7:42 PM | Reply
Well I wasn't being cryptic, but if it was of any help, then it did what it was meant to do.
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