oops I over-looked a typo. "says" in the 28 days later part is really "days" sorry.

paints an interesting picture; fresh. walls? plural? why? I like the "week in plaster" but it pulls me from a simpler time; smacks of technology - maybe a splint?

monumental poem. this is why i miss u. when r u coming back to the city of angels? I am @ the same address. pls come visit

It might work if you would have spelled fucking Jerusalem right.

I'm listening to billy idol and curling my lip in la currently

Verse 2 is very sweet, could be a poem in itself that image.

absolutely brilliant, the symantic fields used just finish it off perfectly

Haikus are easy to write and hard to judge. Are you a canny politician or just a bad writer? That said, the Chinatown grammar kind of pleases me, though I would change the title (since "Remembering _Girl's name_" is never going to go off well anywhere,) and then write about 20 more lines of this.

Were you interrupted while writing this (prhaps by one of the eponymous high-jumps)? What you have is rather good in a fitter-happier sort of way, but it breaks off really, really abruptly and unsatisfyingly. So we dont necessarily read poetry to be satisfied, you say. Buncombe, I say. -8-

When did they change the elixirs of dualism from green to red? Was Dubya responsible for that? Conservatives have it so easy -- only two bottles to choose between at each world-changing nexus.

YOU BULGING CACK OF IGNORANCE. HOW DARE YOU SMEAR HIS MASTER'S JODHPURS WITH AN ANONYMOUS ZERO? I WILL BE REPORTING THIS TO THE SYSTEM ADMINISTRATOR POSTE-HASTE!!!!1 Thanks -10-

Actually at first glance I thought, "Naw. This is a leg puller." Then I read again. And again. While my leg feels much longer, I can't dismiss the feeling that this is good.

You Shouldn't Oughtn't Mightn't Try Because you Can't. So don't. Cant. -0-

great poem!

Did you get your username from an episode of Ant & Dec's "Wonky Donkey"?

sounds too cold to cross with bare feet... I don't think the first stanza is really needed, certainly not the first line (if not, then u could change "water" to "brook") nor is "out of the water" the last "And" could better be "Then"

I really like this one. I like sleep a lot ^^;; so it works great for me. I like the imagery!

reminds me of the poems in the Where the Sidewalk Ends books. Why do you envy my poem writting when you are better, missy?

rather poorly done

Nicely done!