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rather not high jump every 20 minutes, well maybe o.k. (Free verse) by A. Nomaly Look, just like someone
interrupting torrid thoughts just
to check on oil level, its
o.k. now to keep billing hourly
for work done- cleaning
sinks, washing vegetables,
sweeping under bed, absolutely
o.k. to keep the conversation
going for the rhythms sake
and you might learn something(raking
furrowed rows, planting seeds)
Up the ladder:
Alone together apart
Down the ladder:
hopscotch rocks
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Posted: February 5, 2004 9:54 PM PST; Last modified: February 5, 2004 9:54 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0397344 Overall Rank: 7129 Comments:
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<{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54
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5-Feb-04/11:37 PM
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I'm listening to billy idol and curling my lip in la currently
Were you interrupted while writing this (prhaps by one of the eponymous high-jumps)? What you have is rather good in a fitter-happier sort of way, but it breaks off really, really abruptly and unsatisfyingly. So we dont necessarily read poetry to be satisfied, you say. Buncombe, I say. -8-
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