Sam
on some deleted poem
10 Feb 2004, 7:54 PM
Very downrigth true...huh i could empathize because my country is going through such thing. You know the election for presidency and those dirty politicians just, i don't know, say things they never really meant. Sad! i wish they'd rather be sensitive poets doing a poetry reading in public, i'd be much delighted.
Way to go...man of wisdom! keep those wide eyes open! change the world!
Yum.
I usually don't like that style, and i didn't like the beginning, but it certainly picked up pace. Very nice.
Donât decide anything yet.
Let âPeak Oilâ decide for you! 10
Informa\tive, Imaginative and ultimately fuffilling a splendid return to form from -+Fat_Penis=-.
Thank you for your comment, I can say that was better!!! But about your poetry: I can also write stories you know. You maybe think that it´s poetry, but I don´t. A little less story telling only. You can try to write a book, can´t you?
gee??? Yuck??? Something like that, or what??
Shows a total lack of imagination.
More a short story than a poem, but a very good one.
All these lonely people... a huge club it is.
You brought me there.
I was right there with him. Perhaps I became him even.
In the beginning I could smell corn and bread.
Then you ripped me from the vision. Telling me that I couldnât smell.
Confused and disappointed I read on hoping there would be a way to get back the magic.
That somehow it would all make sense.
And then there was this,
âI havenât eaten it what appears to be over six daysâ
This poem could be grand. If onlyâ¦
yes - I predict this will be a big hit, so big in fact, that it will be copied with slight modifications by the Doors, the Animals, and Bob Dylan.
Kept my attention, no small feat for such a block of text.
"I disapprove of politicians" is the most tedious thing in the entire universe to write about.
Therefore it is the opposite of "rockmage's oafish beard".
Is there a contest for lonely poems? Not that I want to write them, but there are so many, it seems there should be. Anyhow, as lonely poems go, this one is great.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
11 Feb 2004, 3:49 PM
This poem has errors in it.
I like it. You are getting better.
not many people use the word anew..whatever works. This was ok until i got to "boo" then I just thought of You Got Served. hahaha. Team Boo.
I wish I was there
dude that almost made me cry