Apart from verses 4 and 6 which are a little lighweight, this really packs a lot of stuff into its lines.

A little long, and the end almost collapses into politikspeak. Good through - the first verse is my favourite.

i love u

Certainly fits the title.

A title's the least of your worries, I'm afraid.

Like Dots, the chewing never ends.

-as our tunnel ends with train- with train? "with a train"? I'm confused. ;/ But other than that, sound cool- when are you going to make the mp3? Blessed with ten.

You could really improve this piece I think. You've drawn the outlines and lightly colored the edges... Give your creation some spicin electric life-colors from the psychedelic rainbow, would ya? Please? Blessed with five.

I like the poem.. but not the linebreaks.. Might I suggest linebreaking it this way?: ____ Nowhere but now here with these last few hours and this setting sun by the drinking trees soaking the breath and the minutes like water for life falling and failing these summer-soft moments throwing us back to the grass-bed holding on where we know we will never be again with dew drops growing beside and beneath the forms we have sunk into the bent-sole grass for these last few failing hours. ---- Blessed with eight.

convincingly conveyed hope.

what was that?

Third line get rid of just Spell realitye correctly And try and make the final four lines make sense. In terms of a title - find a theme in the poem, or write a startling image. That could be used as the title.

Too many pop cliches - to you... you do - crazy in love - - love is real - - laidback style - so naff it would appear in a blue song.

cryptic, clever, technically proficient and accomplished. Great

Good, short lines are always difficult as the break should serve a purpose.

-5-

A little inspiration can be all it takes

hot

Great Poem!

Love It!