yeah well your not my english teacher so I ll just let what you have to say roll on off!!!

LoL I ll read what you have to say and try to learn from it but im a slow learner so....yeah anyways

Yeah, I remember Paris in October too, an overated hump of vibrating asshats on a 'delicate' spin cycle.

Christ, I've seen absorbent papertowels before but never an absorbent Michelle Pfiefer washing the carpet with her carpet.

"And my wombs not yellowed by life," - as good a place as any for: Bow'ls.

Seen a lot of this before, may have been you or a caducus poem. The first line is pretty ace though.

Not sure I understand convicted in the first line. Or the question mark. Reads well enough though.

can nothing but a brownout stop this flowing?

Like the anthropomorphism going on here, and the turn of phrase. 'the roosters made ready' 'ocean... took inventory'

Has a nice poetic feel, which is not always such a bad thing. Pleasant, and has a finished feel to it.

Personally I would prefer the witch to be a character. Then you can bring out these features in a more scholarly and less serially way.

A nice rush-like quality to this. And a good combination of image and narrative. Not sure about sharp smelling as memory. Do you really mean that memory is sharp smelling? Also wet leaves do not really burn.

If you are not a child then you are an idiot -8-

Why do you continue to smear these offerings all over poemeranker like a crusted tramp leaving brownly marks upon a scrambled egg?

rockmage's last login: Tuesday, 17-Feb-04/7:08 PM.

Opps it's spost to be insents.

This is exelent! Definately work you should be proud of.

jow'ls

To be sung bois'trously in Church, lewdly accomp'nied by the following tune: http://www.cyberhymnal.org/htm/g/o/goodking.htm

Thank you for including the link to the tune - I was struggling to amermer it. crap - the link is too busy; will try later. Christmas is forever improved.