nice images. i love the word caustic. it reminds me of this band "Caustic Notions" but thats beside the point. this sounds like something i would write, therefore, i like it.

its cute

In response, to clarify, I capitalized the "A" for a reason. I want it to be read 2 different ways. Well, maybe not quite so different but if you read it again, you may see what I mean. That is also why I left the 'y' lowercase. I do that a lot in my poems, should you come across it again. The word "spell" was also repititious for a reason. I agree with you that the reader might not be clear on what the poem is about, however my intention is to hopefully guide the reader into coming to their own conclusion in regards to how my words portray one portion of what may be going on in their life. Anyway, thanks for the comments and I hope mine might have cleared some things up for you.

An accident involving your bum and a gay man's knob.

A crab nappy.

<VERSE THREE - In Whiche Our Hero Concludes His Adventures in a Moste Curious Fashion!> Now your thighs are wet with a sweaty gruel, The scent's intense, yeah, but I'm one stool You can't pick off with paper so you'll Have to M*A*S*H me, babe, cause I'm Klinger. Cause I'm not gonna drop or disappear - Except, perhaps, if it wasn't so queer, (Which I hate) you could make like Richard Gere And push me back in with One Finger (-Answer, I mean, or Bachus or Shuushin - Now come on Everyone, & start the confusion!)

I don't know what's going to get you into more trouble. Homosexuals thinking you're comparing them to Jews, or the Jews thinking you're saying they’re homosexuals. Watch it or you'll find either your bunghole or portfolio violated. Could be both! :)

This is the best of your posts. I meant what I said before, though I originally suspected Jeremi or one of the British. Consider that a bonus compliment.

Okay, I get what you mean by "original" now. Just a suggested edit on verse three, "cause I'm Klinger" is good, but maybe "cause I'm a Klinger" would be better? Otherwise a simply marvelous feast, on the unknown thoughts of a constipated nugget of furry waste :)

Dissociative identity disorder I think. Often associated with those abused as a child. The homosexual alter ego - probably how freud would have explained DID. Like on most things he would be wrong.

Each of these lines should be cut in half, or thirds, or whatever. "The one your mother wouldn’t let you wear inside the house" should be deleted.

Please say 'saw' instead of 'envisioned'. Thank you.

Why do you feel the need to censor your own use of the word 'fucking'? Are you so ground down by the repressive culture of your country you can't even bear to type it out properly?

Like how you got from sheep to where's my drink in one easy step.

Blood does not puss, it bleeds. Also I do not think you should be ending a line with 'the', twice!

Nature could create a bird flying free. Only man could create the window. A bit drawn out the sentiment here, you have five lines to say the bird has free will.

The repetition is a bit odd. Like 'love with the right amount of personification' and pockets in hands'

Some of the similes and metaphors, because they are not extended through the poeme, can be confusing. Some interesting ones though.

It reads well of course, but the first line is no good. 'a stay in your mountains' at best it is a crude euphemism.

Could do with being shortened, would help to manage the rhythm.