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on It's A Long Way From Heaven by Blindpoetry
28 Apr 2004, 2:19 AM
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Go away. You're meant to be dead.
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Nice idea, a little weaker towards the end, too much sentimentality for my taste, but a wonderful idea.
"During many of their sexual encounters, the NEGRO stood leaning against the doorway of the bathroom across from the study, which, he told Ms. LOUISA, eased his sore back... Ms. LOUISA testified that her physical relationship with the NEGRO included oral sex but not sexual intercourse. According to Ms. LOUISA, she performed oral sex on the NEGRO; he never performed oral sex on her. Initially, according to Ms. LOUISA, the NEGRO would not let her perform oral sex to completion. In Ms. LOUISA's understanding, his refusal was related to "trust and not knowing me well enough." During their last two sexual encounters, both in 1997, he did ejaculate. According to Ms. LOUISA, she performed oral sex on the NEGRO on nine occasions. On all nine of those occasions, the NEGRO fondled and kissed her bare breasts. He touched her genitals, both through her underwear and directly, bringing her to orgasm on two occasions. On one occasion, the NEGRO inserted a cigar into her vagina. On another occasion, she and the NEGRO had brief genital-to-genital contact."
what is an example, please, of a stolen transport tool?
I liked it.
Too funny, I was going to mention that the thing reeked of a pink floyd lyric - and that started from the line:
"I got ancient blood on my hands,"
then I noticed the disclaimer at the end.
It makes me feel as if I'm attending a new age funeral proceeding conducted by an unknown militant cult- but thats not bad, mostly I liked it, but its well.. slightly more stiff than a catholic sermon, to me anyway.
Blessed with eight.
Well done crystal.
"This uncertainty serves as an anxiety enhancer"
If I didn't know better, I'd say you'd somehow turned into a Mature Poete in your absence.
The people upstairs are humping so hard it sounds like a timpani rehearsal.
Let me know if my photo doesn't work
I loved that trilogoy! Rock and roll.
You are right. What I meant to say was that asking mona lisa for head under the pseudonym Dirk Diggler was ungentlemanly.
Don't do it again.
I think it is good, except for the fact that you do not degrade women enough. How bout a dose of misogyny tossed in for good measure, and maybe snuffle up some rails in there somewhere?
Oh my...
actually, Mezcal has the worm in it, not Tequila. other than that i enjoyed the poem until the last two lines, which came as a sudden shift. i don't mind a quick twist, but i liked where the poem was going rather than where it ended up.
this seems to make a political statement... but what? "free speech isn't free" seems to point towards war, but then it's forgotten. the first five lines all point towards a political idea. perhaps the title could reflect that? or maybe you had no political motive, and i just read into it too much...
Love affair and inebriation. This has been done before. In fact there is a track on the Katie Melua album Call off the search (there will be no more). Lilac wine or something.
Anyway what have we learnt. Yes, that the idea is stolen from Mike Batt the creative mind behing both Melua and the wombles-- Underground overground wombling free/ the wombles of wimbledon/ common are we.
I'm agreeing with H; if the whole story comes out, the quality goes way up. I like it, and I see where it's going... I just want to read how it ends.