daveslady
on I Love You by jude
28 Apr 2004, 3:41 PM
Ive been there before, funny how things that we think will never change seem to change the most
Violet suede... now that's a lot of woman.
wow, very good
rather depressing at the end there
I'm assuming that you've read "I, Robot." The poem reminded me of it; if you haven't read it, definitely pick it up. Isaac Asimov picks up that question and a whole slew of others. As for the poem itself, I like how in four short lines you address two key issues: AI and slavery. Well done.
I feel it is only fair not to submit my picture since I far outclass you all.
After reading the comments, I considered reading this.
Then I thought better of it.
Some of this is really nice. The rhythm, though, is so almost-regular it really hits you where it's not.
It is very tightly packed with language and all that, but where is it going. Anywhere?
Since you told us the wood is the habitat, I'll believe you, but woud not have thought of it that way. Otherwise, I like it much.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
28 Apr 2004, 1:55 PM
It's hard to grope on the ground after riding a bird. Very nice.
Good one, H.
The Law of Diminishing Returns asserts that marginal gains in profit begin to decrease at a certain point of production and that this reduction continues as more output is produced until marginal gains are actually negative (negative returns). I believe that this princiiple is actually at play with regard to your work which continues to be highly fragmented and disjointed, lacks originality and is agonizingly melodramatic. It all smells so much like a sorry assed soap opera...Hey but who am I to judge you .....my writing sucks too. Peace Joe-Joe
Herpes.
That's not a ghazal.
Once, a rumor went abroad that I could snizzle my own weasel because I was triple jointed in the asswagon. Of course it was true. I snhack on my own shrozz.
Great title. Good last line. In between a bit sobby.