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Herman (Free verse) by richa
Like the fern burnt by frost planted in north's shade is the hermit. A strange alphabet of runes and figures played out has left him left out. But we feel no sadness, we are bees at a honeypot; he has no sweet tooth.

Up the ladder: Reckoning

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.0
Weighted score: 7.0
Overall Rank: 82
Posted: April 27, 2004 7:32 AM PDT; Last modified: April 27, 2004 10:17 AM PDT
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[9] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 | 27-Apr-04/8:16 AM | Reply
A way of saying he has no ambition?

I'm still noodling the runes and figures. Thinking stockmarket, but that goes against the ambition thing.

Lost his ambition?
[n/a] richa @ 81.178.217.164 > Shuushin | 27-Apr-04/8:53 AM | Reply
The comment I make in my poems tends to be the flaws in the logic of the voices. i.e. why the hermit is outcast: 'he has no sweet tooth'.
[10] zodiac @ 152.30.60.103 | 27-Apr-04/8:19 AM | Reply
Punctuate after honeypot.
[9] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 > zodiac | 27-Apr-04/8:24 AM | Reply
how's that paper coming? - and you forgot to give him a ranking.
[10] zodiac @ 152.30.60.103 > Shuushin | 27-Apr-04/8:35 AM | Reply
Didn't I?

5 more pages. I'm currently stealing sources quoted in other articles and quoting them as independent citations, for which I will surely burn in criticism hell, alongside any professor gufftuous enough to assign a source quota on a graduate research paper. The bad news is, despite my best efforts Blake's still a monstrously guffy woman-hating curmudgeonly spaz and producer of some of the most illiterate poetry ever to stain my eyes.
[10] zodiac @ 152.30.60.103 > zodiac | 27-Apr-04/8:37 AM | Reply
Yes, I'm including poemranker poetry in that appraisal.
[9] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 > zodiac | 27-Apr-04/8:39 AM | Reply
Saying Blake is a bad poet - is that like saying Ringo is a bad drummer?
[10] zodiac @ 152.30.60.103 > Shuushin | 27-Apr-04/8:43 AM | Reply
Ringo was a decent drummer. Here's some Blake for you:

"God bless thy poor bald pate. God bless. thy hollow winking eyes
God bless thy shriveld beard. God. bless. thy many wrinkled forehead
Thou hast no teeth old man & thus I kiss thy sleek bald head
Heva come kiss his bald head for he will not hurt us Heva"
- Tiriel 2:32-35
[10] zodiac @ 152.30.60.103 > zodiac | 27-Apr-04/9:22 AM | Reply
"He leaned toward me and put his face inches from mine. “You have the aura of election upon you,” he breathed. I hoped he was talking about my poetry. I moved back and took the manuscript and turned it around so he could read. The next thing I knew, his heavy, boneless hand was hot on my thigh. I lurched away. “This is not what I meant,” I stammered. The whole thing had suddenly taken on the quality of a bad horror film. The floor spun. By now my back was against the sink, which was as far away as I could get. He moved toward me. I turned away from him toward the sink and found myself vomiting. Bloom disappeared. When he reemerged - from the bedroom with his coat — a moment later, I was still frozen, my back against the sink. He said: “You are a deeply troubled girl.” Then he went to the table, took the rest of his sherry, corked the bottle, and left."
- [Famous feminist Blake scholar] Naomi Wolf describing being sexually harassed in 1983 by [even more famous sexist Blake scholar] Harold Bloom

"I can't help it. I was born with this face of an aged lecher."
- sexist Blake scholar Harold Bloom, responding to her charges

For proof, take a look at http://tinyurl.com/2q5fl
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > zodiac | 27-Apr-04/9:33 AM | Reply
That is the best thing in the world ever.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 66.229.187.185 > Shuushin | 27-Apr-04/11:38 AM | Reply
They both suck.
[9] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 27-Apr-04/10:47 AM | Reply
I like this a lot, but would leave out "runes and"
The fern also is bothersome because all ferns do best in north shade and all are burned by frost if one is.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 66.229.187.185 | 27-Apr-04/11:38 AM | Reply
Not utterly thrilling, but then again, you are on a rascol scooter in a high wind.
[8] ggawrysi @ 147.9.151.22 | 28-Apr-04/12:07 PM | Reply
all my critiques were previously stated by others. i will simply state that i enjoyed it.
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 20-Feb-06/11:33 AM | Reply
Dammit, why have I not read more of your works? I was gone for too long. This is a wonderful read.
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