Re: Tawn-tastic by Topaz Servias	14-Apr-04/1:01 PM
I'm sorry, but you're not a native french speaker.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/4:49 PM
Use more sound-music besides rhyme in this poem
Re: Unseen Death by Fire_is_cool	14-Apr-04/7:19 PM
Show, don't tell
Re: Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	14-Apr-04/7:28 PM
Not a sonnet
Re: The Queen & The Locksmith by Jeremi B. Handrinos	14-Apr-04/7:30 PM
Not Iambic pentameter. Forced. Inverted, introverted. A bad poem in general
Re: The Smarts aint Stupids by Shardik	14-Apr-04/7:32 PM
This is not iambic pentameter, rather amateurish in its construction, and, above all, makes no sense.
Re: Dear Lord by simone_girard	14-Apr-04/7:32 PM
Not a sonnet.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/7:36 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/7:37 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/7:37 PM
Would you mind not recycling old poems by slightly editing them. It pushes the genuinely new creations off the "recent" list
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/7:51 PM
I must say, being a translator of poetry, a linguist, and a poet, that the idea of relative beauty of languages is a myth. It is obvious to me that this poem was written by a native english speaker translating english clichés into Spanish to make them sound fresh."te amo con todo mi corazón" for example certainly would not sound as good as the cliché "I love you with all my heart" from which it was translated. Also it should be "te conozco" not "conozco tigo."
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Apr-04/7:54 PM
oh, and it's "más romantica que EN Ingles" you need the preposition in Spanish, even in comparisons
Re: A ballerina bubble bath by horus8	14-Apr-04/9:20 PM
GOOD! One of the very few poems on PoemRanker that is actually worth reading! Shortening of the lines would make it more immediate in effect and impact
Re: Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie	14-Apr-04/9:24 PM
the breath/death rhyme is cliché and expected (Other than shibboleth, seth, and elizabeth, there aren't any modern english words that rhyme with death/breath) rather Well executed though
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Apr-04/9:44 AM
This reminds me, in style though not in message, of W.S. Merwin I give this poem a seven in part because it is frank, with little imagery which is not a vice in and of itself (if it were Pushkin would not be the great poet he is) but also, the words do not seem to use their sound to enhance the poem and to conjure up the thought for themselves. What I mean by this can be better illustrated by example. Take Robert Frost when talking about a woman who slept with a nightlight on: Good gloom on her was thrown away. These sounds work together perfectly and inimitably. One feels they are somehow "right" for what is said. If you don't use a lot of imagery, try for what I am tempted to call word-music