| Re: Summer Song by wilco |
31-Aug-05/3:42 PM |
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The lines seem too long for the subject matter they contain
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6-Sep-05/9:24 AM |
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Beautiful. A wonderful parody of the kind of crap teenagers seem to churn out. You've managed to mimic the brain-dead internet "i'm" and added that special flavor of mediocrity with such brilliantly planted cunt-spellings as "your" for "you're," "everytime" for "every time," "loyality," "royality," "deceave." In short, everything from the pervasive triteness to the rhythms limp as geriatric penis shows how ingeniously you have studied teenage doggerel and how faithfully and convincingly you can mimic and parody it. A well deserved 10.
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6-Sep-05/9:30 AM |
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Another excellent parody. Keep up the good work!
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7-Sep-05/9:00 AM |
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I AM AMAZED. Not only did you infuse this excellent parody with utter crap as you have so brilliantly done in the past, but YOU EVEN VOTED ON YOU OWN POEM, thereby increasing the level of absurdity giving it, once again, a well deserved -10-
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7-Sep-05/9:04 AM |
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I'm disappointed, now I can't laugh at anything but the general triteness. For that you get an 8.
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7-Sep-05/9:05 AM |
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AGAIN with the voting on your own poem. You're on a roll.
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8-Sep-05/11:03 AM |
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You are hurting the internet.
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| Re: So Easy by InWonderLand |
5-Nov-06/8:07 PM |
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This poem doesen't hold any water. I have nothing to sink my teeth into; only a dim, colorless confessional atmosphere that is totally out of place. Give me some life!
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7-Nov-06/5:53 PM |
You're kidding, right?
If you're going to use archaisms, at least have the sense to know how to use them. "Doth," whose usefulness died with the last perfunctory wannabe romantic, is a singular form of "do" and therefore cannot have a plural subject. "Where rats doth go" makes you sound nothing but pretentious. Anyone who rhymes death with breath is really not adept with verbal gymnastics.
"I fear" is the most forced of rhymes in this poem, closely by "snow/go/so"
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| Re: Pink BAlls by EAger to Offend |
20-Apr-07/9:56 PM |
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| Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
20-Apr-07/10:00 PM |
You rhymed kiss and bliss. That alone earns you the great award of "cliché." You also refer to bliss as heavenly. This earns the award of "overt cliché." You use absolutely no novel imagery or language or even display the slightest awareness that a poem is a form of artwork.
In other words, this is a bad poem for just about every reason a poem can be bad.
-2- for effort
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| Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010 |
20-Apr-07/10:03 PM |
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You also had poor enough taste to VOTE ON YOUR OWN POEM ANONYMOUSLY.
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| Re: The Corner Tavern by jessicazee |
20-Apr-07/10:04 PM |
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It's like mallarmé , but without the musicality and with a damp lyricism.
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| Re: Always there by holliebollie_19 |
22-Apr-07/5:35 AM |
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| Re: Easter by thetrev |
22-Apr-07/5:36 AM |
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"Literary" in the worst sense of the word
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| Re: Forbidden by jduzz |
22-Apr-07/5:37 AM |
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You've got to be kidding. This is some of the most cliché crap I've seen
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| Re: Winter Moon by Musicman |
28-Oct-07/10:44 PM |
Starlit night: Cliché
Nightly gloom: Redundant cliché
Find a less cliché word than "Ghostly"
Other than that, not bad
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| Re: The Grip by drnick |
28-Oct-07/11:15 PM |
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| Re: HATE by forsaken'sbigbro |
15-Nov-07/2:54 PM |
Pitiful
Voting on your own poems.
Insecurity is sooooo hot. OMG ur like a starving artist ZOMG
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| Re: Flood Land, East Kentucky by zodiac |
17-Apr-10/10:29 PM |
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You should totally come back!!
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