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21-Aug-02/8:13 PM |
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OK, got it! I knew it would work for me once I got through that little snare, I was right there feeling it up until that point. 8/10
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| Re: Hunny by Venus |
21-Aug-02/9:40 PM |
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Thanks zin, nice to have a hit ;)
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| Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus |
22-Aug-02/9:23 AM |
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Thanks Christof, glad you liked. And no, P&T, you most certainly cannot watch!
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22-Aug-02/9:25 AM |
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| Re: Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus |
22-Aug-02/9:27 AM |
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And dude, that is hilarious. 7/10
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22-Aug-02/10:08 AM |
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I can see that this one may be too obscure. It was actaully inspired by a piece in one of Jeremi's poems, regarding women (Asian prostitutes specifically) who save themselves (cherry) for marriage by engaging in only anal sex (starfish = asshole). Just an image I got. Maybe too obscure though, huh?
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22-Aug-02/10:18 AM |
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22-Aug-02/10:26 AM |
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Ok, so literal cherries don't grow on a vine, and figurative cherries don't dangle, and it's a tad obscure. Me thinks I should delete and try this one again, hmm?
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| Re: Hunny by Venus |
22-Aug-02/10:59 AM |
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No, Alexander, I didn't kill him (in the literal sense anyway). And thank you so much for your kind offer to wrap yourself in my legs. I will give it some thought. I've been glancing through your work, and will certainly rank/comment as time permits today - like what I see so far ; )
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| Re: Sunshine by alexander |
22-Aug-02/11:13 AM |
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A great image, I can see it... can it see me? 8/10
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| Re: The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
22-Aug-02/11:25 AM |
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Hits all the right angles, and then dangles, just so. 7/10
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| Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus |
22-Aug-02/2:36 PM |
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as long as it's not with your bad taco meat, beef-boy.
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| Re: haiku cycle 1 by mudskipper |
22-Aug-02/2:39 PM |
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Very good, let's see some more. 7/10
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| Re: Hendrix by unknown |
22-Aug-02/2:44 PM |
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I really do like the language, but at the same time feel it makes an enemy of the form. I especially like the ending, but I'm not quite loving it as a whole. 6/10
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| Re: aphelion by DespondentDotCom |
22-Aug-02/2:54 PM |
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Quit that cursed job and live again! Grow some balls and stop compromising, damn ye! Love the last bit. 7/10
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| Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus |
22-Aug-02/3:14 PM |
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This should clear things up: starfish is a cute little nickname for my... no, you're right DA, they should know what we know. But god-woman-wife, didn't I explain this to you already today?
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| Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus |
22-Aug-02/3:21 PM |
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Without becoming overly literal here, I beg to differ. oops, looks like my dirty little secret's out... look what you've gone and made me do, god-woman-wife!!!
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| Re: The Matrix by DespondentDotCom |
22-Aug-02/3:31 PM |
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First, glad you called this one a freeform. Second, I'm enjoying your little film critique ditties, yes indeed, I like it. Third, I agree, The Matrix is a big gun wankathon for boys with little guns ; ) 7/10
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| Re: Dark Lady by quantumenterprises |
22-Aug-02/3:55 PM |
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I'm still laughing, I absolutely love this! At first I thought it was about sleep (yawn), but no, that's fantastic. While my preferred sleepmate is the red, red, wine, I still say 9/10 for the loving, and might I say, bittersweet ode.
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| Re: Window poems by kawakurdi |
22-Aug-02/4:46 PM |
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This is absolutely beautiful. I'm normally rather cynical when it comes to straightforward 'love poems', but this one moved me - Bravo! 10/10
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