regarding some deleted poem...	22-Aug-02/11:15 PM
The 2nd stanza is fabulous; I would get rid of S1 and S3 and start again, work off S2.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Aug-02/11:36 PM
BD - I'm guessing you meant for the last line to read 'tilted', not 'titled', yes?
Re: Blind by shwenatjadeflower	27-Aug-02/9:40 PM
Hmmm... I've dated guys like this before, pains in the arses in my opinion - but I've never been much for the 'eyes wide shut' types. The poem has some good emotion, and I especially like the line "Promises are little white lies that are forgotten over time" - how true. I would continue to tighten it up. 6/10
Re: Esplanade by Wulf	27-Aug-02/10:14 PM
Does the word Esplanade represent Mother Earth here? Not sure I can put all of this together, but some of these lyrics are fantastic. 7/10
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/10:37 PM
Ah ha, this is my kind of poetry. Reminds me of Janis or Joni lyrics, and I am right here singing along with you sister! 9/10
Re: Work by poetandknowit	27-Aug-02/10:51 PM
This is one tasty ditty; a pleasure to read. I appreciate the stream of consciousness style sans meandering. Blue and tight! 9/10
Re: Horseflies and Mayflies, Incessant Today by Christof	27-Aug-02/11:24 PM
Wow, this is a really moving piece. You really have a knack for telling big stories using the fewest possible words - the true beauty of poetry. 10/10
Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus	27-Aug-02/11:32 PM
Z! You nailed the exact two lines I was fighting with! I'll take your musings and run! Oh, and yes, you nailed the motivation behind it as well.
Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus	27-Aug-02/11:44 PM
Thanks! I'll consider those, and maybe come up with some kind of amalgamation tomorrow... must crawl into bed for now, as I'm keeping the house awake with all of my deafening 'hunt & peck'ing ; )
Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus	29-Aug-02/9:41 AM
DA - I reckon 'cries' would be grammatically correct, but I just liked the short sound of 'cry' - thanks for the legitimate criticism though.
Re: Escapism by vulcan	29-Aug-02/9:43 AM
Yep, I feel like this some days, too. 8/10
Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus	29-Aug-02/4:54 PM
Thanks GW, and I think you may know what I'm talking about... hint: keep your mind in the gutter, where it belongs! Mine seems to thrive down there ; )
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/10:04 PM
This piece is complex and intense - I'd really like to see more from you. Please work on format though, I hate to scroll while reading - throws off the scan. Thanks. 10/10
Re: A Hard Lesson Learned by kristenk69lover	29-Aug-02/10:11 PM
Kristen - God and Men have absolutely nothing to do with one another.
Re: All Around Me by brazen	29-Aug-02/10:14 PM
Go outside and play, will ya?
Re: Thousand Tears by kristenk69lover	29-Aug-02/10:26 PM
Girlfriend, please don't say that you would really die a horrible death over some guy - that just ain't right. I do understand that it feels that way now, but someday... someday, when you are a little bit older, you'll know that the statement is ridiculous.
Re: Fallen Leaves From a Tree by kristenk69lover	29-Aug-02/10:36 PM
Kristen - you have potential, keep working on it. And if you want some true critique and help, there are some wonderful poets that can help you on this site. Just ask them for help. Specifically, zzinnia and god's wife can be very helpful to struggling poets in the mist.
Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit	29-Aug-02/10:40 PM
These are fantastic, from one who's been there. I'll give it a 10/10 to make up for anything you may have lost in the revisions.
Re: Fetch by Limness	29-Aug-02/11:19 PM
I hope they don't run out, elsen I'll be in some big trouble! 7/10
Re: An Introduction by 1Sapphire1	30-Aug-02/11:52 AM
Both sweet and sad - I like. 7/10