Re: Fallen Leaves From a Tree by kristenk69lover |
30-Aug-02/12:09 PM |
DA - I thought it was poemwanker, but what does that have to do with anything anyway? I rank, I comment, I do my little duty.
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30-Aug-02/12:21 PM |
Great images throughout, perfect ending, made me laugh. 8/10
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Re: Confessor's Nightcap by Limness |
30-Aug-02/12:24 PM |
I like your style - it's very underrated so far - I can't be the only one, can I? 7/10
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Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus |
30-Aug-02/1:52 PM |
Z - took your initial suggestions, thanks again!
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30-Aug-02/2:02 PM |
I'm wanting to like this, but some of your language is throwing me off - specifically 'felicioius' and 'chaffinches'. Can you define these for me?
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30-Aug-02/3:17 PM |
I like the new stanza. Recasting my original vote.
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30-Aug-02/3:19 PM |
Thanks for clarifying and editing. I really do like this. 8/10
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Re: Women by Prosper |
30-Aug-02/3:25 PM |
Too many spelling errors, and the lack of line breaks is frustrating as hell. Consider editing.
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Re: The boy who shot birds by Bachus |
30-Aug-02/3:39 PM |
This is great stuff - grrrrrreat! Thought-provoking commentary with a perfect opening companion piece of poetry. I hear you loud and clear. And I hate that fucker, too. 9/10
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Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
31-Aug-02/7:37 AM |
I have indeed succumbed - it was that German chocolate cake what made me do it! BTW, here's a slight twist to try on your next batch of Avgolemono - add fresh chopped parsley to the broth and rice prior to adding the eggs (nice color splash & enhanced flavor), and use the juice of TWO lemons... mmm mmm, lemono good! And thanks for the compliment on my hair, I really was having a 'great hair day' yesterday. Hope they do a good job on your cut ; ) 8/10
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Re: Terror Too Tranquil by RaychelW |
31-Aug-02/7:47 AM |
Your poems have an easy flow. This is good work. 8/10
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Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
31-Aug-02/12:31 PM |
Indeed I'm a mad mongrel mix like yourself - Russian & Greek from Mom's side, French & Indian from Dad's... your basic lover/fighter mixed breed. The lemono is my specialty all-winter-long soup, makes me feel all warm and snuggly during those cold and snowy Colorado winters. Just getting around to watching the music awards finally - oh that little Marshall Mathers, ya gotta love him! h luv v.
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31-Aug-02/12:50 PM |
Good afternoon GW, and welcome back. Please see my slightly edited version of Intense Irrational Realities (per Z's suggestions), including my response to your request for clarification on it's meaning. Do tell me what you think - much obliged.
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Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus |
31-Aug-02/1:17 PM |
How did I ever miss this little gem from the God of Spilled Wine??? You know, I paid a visit to Bacchus last year in Firenze - Michelangelo's version anyway - my favorite wino right up close and personal! Me-O-My! I was so inspired I drank three bottles of chianti that day (rather than the usual two). Just have the show on in the background right now, a train wreck I can't help but peek at. You make good observations, and hey, at least the show inspired you to write a piece. Thoughts so far: Pink - henna tats all over her body; faux ink - how telling. What's up with the token little white boy on stage with all the brothers, everyone pretending he can dance? The Hives - hey, isn't that Beck singing? Hmm, sure looks like Beck, moves like Beck, oh wait, no, can't be, cuz Beck is Prince, no wait, oh, fuck it, I'm confused... 7/10
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Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus |
31-Aug-02/1:22 PM |
Damn, those are good suggestions too. Wonder how many times I'll have to revise this thing before I get it...
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Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus |
31-Aug-02/1:32 PM |
Shit, I can't stop now, my old buddy Axl is coming on soon, can't miss that... v luv b luv h luv b~y
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Re: A journey to the sun by kawakurdi |
31-Aug-02/2:49 PM |
Reminds me of a Third Eye Blind song called 'Wounded', which I really dig. Not sure about the 'Hooray, hooray, hooray' bit, but great images and overall I like it very much. 9/10
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Re: Variance of the tapeworm by horus8 |
31-Aug-02/3:07 PM |
Yeah, fucking hypocrites! Nice jab, h. 9/10! How about another line, beginning with 'If you're such a poet....... '
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Re: Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit |
2-Oct-02/11:18 PM |
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Re: Liberty bells & Disney Land by horus8 |
2-Oct-02/11:20 PM |
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