Re: Labeled Retarded by Beyond_Dreams	29-Mar-05/10:02 PM
What do you mean by 'average'? Oh, that they have individual characteristics. Hey, good call. Because surely you can't mean 'as averagely intelligent as you and I'. Since that's what retarded means: lower than average intelligence. PS-"as average as you and I" is really great if you think about it drunk or for longer than ten seconds.
Re: Memories of a Suicidal Sophomore by CemeteryBuffsOnline	29-Mar-05/10:21 PM
What??? What did you do with the knife, then?
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Mar-05/6:17 AM
re: "The poetry I write and the images I paint, Capture only parts of what I feel for you." That would be only the maudlin and trite parts? Do you ever wonder about that?
Re: late night delirium by not_a_philosopher	3-Apr-05/4:10 AM
Yeah, we're not likely to understand, especially considering this exact idea has been overdiscussed since Torah times.
Re: tumbleweed by crooked_smile	3-Apr-05/4:15 AM
٠وعقة انت؟
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Apr-05/4:19 AM
What's with the random words in quotation marks? Is that when you're meta-clicheing?
Re: All About Me by chocolate9009	3-Apr-05/4:20 AM
Welcome to the world! You must be five years old.
Re: He hit me over the head with a by T. Jonathron Remp	3-Apr-05/4:25 AM
You misused "whence".
Re: Celestial Veil by Hadasl	6-Apr-05/3:35 AM
When God is lonely, do you think He ever imagines looking at nude girls, the way humans do? PS-I know you don't separate Jesus and God in the poem, but I imagine them separate and, you know, like hanging out alot. I mean, why the hell wouldn't they?
Re: Hanging Gallows by Hadasl	6-Apr-05/3:39 AM
"here" should be "hear" "Poseidon's wheeze" should be anything else.
Re: Yesterdays testament by Caducus	6-Apr-05/3:45 AM
The Bible lies, not lays.
Re: Nothingness by beck2457	6-Apr-05/3:45 AM
It wasn't very interesting, except to you.
Re: Moments (or) Suicide by Dovina	6-Apr-05/3:49 AM
I don't follow the last sentence. Are you going to be evaluated for the 70% ratio, or for your failure to have more Moments in thirty-something years of existing?
Re: Hard Rock by Dovina	7-Apr-05/6:22 AM
I used to think "Jesus, how lucky I was to have been born in America in the twentieth century and not in Africa, the Dark Ages, or outer space!" Then I realized what a stupid thing it was to say that.
Re: Church of Puerto Vallarta by James Rykelangeli	7-Apr-05/6:35 AM
Consider making more, shorter sentences.
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	9-Apr-05/10:18 PM
This is among the top, oh, five most disastrous things you've ever written. Some questions: 1) What "freedom", "authority" and "power"? Oh, you mean the Black President. Or maybe you mean for the oppressed in your poem to be Middle-aged white women, and the oppressed group men who would be secretaries but (until recently) were denied the opportunity. 2) Are you being ironic? 3) Do you know? 4) If you are, do you really mean the exact opposite (like ironists tend to do)? 5) Have you ever read Margaret Atwood's short story "Rape Fantasies"? You should. 6) Do you think you can still be friends with al-naafiiysh, blacksoul, and jroday after this? 7) No vote.
Re: a note on content by not_a_philosopher	9-Apr-05/10:47 PM
You don't have more than a middle-schooler's familiarity with poetry, do you?
Re: science by whispern_smoke_wisp	9-Apr-05/10:51 PM
You're wrong. Dogs do love humans. They've evolved to love humans. They evolved that way because the pack-behavior and imprinting that help them find food and fend off predators in the wild reacts well to a different-species dominant male (i.e., a human owner). Jared Diamond writes extensively on the topic in Guns, Germs, and Steel, before going on to discuss how zebras, though pack-oriented, have never been successfully domesticated. Nor even very well tamed, except by the eccentric Walter Rothschild, 2nd Baron Rothschild, who once rode a zebra-driven cart into Buckingham Palace (http://www.nhm.ac.uk/museum/tring/history/history.html) PS-I propose you think dogs don't really love humans because they have reasons for loving us, while you expect love to be somehow, I don't know, unconditional and profitless for the lover. That's just crazy.
Re: MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears	9-Apr-05/10:56 PM
You can't be amidst a mind. You can be amidst minds, or amidst the wrinkly lobes of a brain. PS-congratulations on staging the return of napkins to poemranker. It's been a while. -10-
Re: Utensils of creation by Damien	12-Apr-05/5:45 AM
"there" in the last line should be "their". Don't put commas at the end of every line, but do put it where it belongs. And some of these lines don't make sense or are simply wrong, especially the last two. I think you might have been more interested in the rhyme instead of saying what you meant.