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Celestial Veil (Free verse) by Hadasl
One day as he looked down at his creation,
both with contempt and admiration
god let a tear fall down his cheek
because it's lonely at the peak
Each day as he looks upon his own invention
he suffers in solitude by a purdah of heaven
for who can look past his celestial veil,
and see him as a being, allmighty and frail?
True, he has servants, a multitude of veneration
but where is an equal, a comrade, superior?
he lost it all much before the ascension
for no one loves a master, he fashioned them inferior
At each season of spring, each joyous newborn
That he suffered for with his crown of thorns
who does he smile to, who does he laugh with,
and who bothers to ask about the infinite blacksmith?
So thus god tires of being great,
of billions of worshippers and immortal seclusion,
for what is achievement if it's shrouded in loneliness?
Simple superficiality if without an inclusion
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6285
Posted: April 5, 2005 11:29 PM PDT; Last modified: April 5, 2005 11:29 PM PDT
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PS-I know you don't separate Jesus and God in the poem, but I imagine them separate and, you know, like hanging out alot. I mean, why the hell wouldn't they?