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25-Oct-03/4:51 PM |
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I am quite utterly in shock! What was that? You people are whacked!!!
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27-Oct-03/10:43 AM |
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uuughhh!!! with the typo's - of course that's what I meant...
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28-Oct-03/8:00 AM |
my thanks to each of you. I did run the caps at each line (don't usually - now I know why...)
Y2KSlamPoet - my apologies for stiring that memory - and condolences. I thank you for the vote none the less...
Best.
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| Re: Teaching Beetles To Swim by Bobjim |
28-Oct-03/8:04 AM |
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I think this title is great...
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| Re: Love by EouSou |
30-Oct-03/11:12 AM |
This was very sweet - Naive, but sweet. Unless you've lived through a 4 year old whom you have to chase through a store - you've no idea - and the sweet sentimentality doesn't last...
As for Doylum's comments - if you're only lasting 2 min 12 sec. or bangin someone who does - they've drugs for that now - you may want to check into it...
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1-Nov-03/6:34 AM |
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Lovely sentiment. I give it an 8.
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| Re: my stuff is like stuff by skaskowski |
4-Nov-03/2:28 PM |
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too much reminding me of "my body's like whoa". Hip hop it's not but - interesting. the last line didn't work for me - you've already mentioned the spit dripping poison and all I could see was pussing eyes...nope, not a pretty site.
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| Re: The Burial by Mona Lisa |
8-Nov-03/6:04 AM |
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I loved the dark melodrama of this piece. I give you a 9...
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| Re: Leaving in the Morning by leviathan |
8-Nov-03/6:06 AM |
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an unborn child talking to its mother before some fatalistic decision? Intriguing - and I like the voice.
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8-Nov-03/6:09 AM |
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oh that damn muse - distracting us to insanity.
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| Re: Awefucked by a Shushin Shitzu (freefuck) by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
8-Nov-03/6:11 AM |
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Do you kiss your mother - your grandmother - or (lord protect us - from your procreation) your children with that mouth?
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8-Nov-03/6:16 AM |
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A soldier home? A soldier wishing he were home? or a man watching way too much CNN and becoming corrupt by the media's single mindedness of continually showing the evils of man?
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| Re: Mirror to Mirror by Roisin |
13-Nov-03/8:48 AM |
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God! This was excellent - I could relate to everything you've listed here. The tone is wonderful - the long suffering - yet not willing to choose the same course - to not shed more tears on a situation that has grown pointless and numb. Wonderful - I'm keeping a copy of this one... I give you a 9.
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14-Nov-03/2:59 PM |
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thanks all. By "they" I meant elders or those before real knowledge changed their ideas. I changed the title about five times - still not sure I'll go with this one. Any suggestions?
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19-Nov-03/9:14 AM |
horus8 - seriously, do you kiss your mother with that mouth? You lost my interest in whether or not your opinion really matters, and whether you truly have something useful and possibly educating to contribute at the beginning of the second line - the rest was just garbage. Don't just critique to hear your own voice float around between your ears - if you have something useful to say, by all means, lets hear it. Otherwise, save the bs for those who haven't been published..
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| Re: Being by horus8 |
19-Nov-03/9:19 AM |
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I liked this - the possibility that your child was destined to be yours. Sometimes it's hard to remember that in the midst of math homework that they just don't understand (and, in their opinion, never will). Hold onto that beauty - as they grow, somedays it's all you've got...
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| Re: A Cup Of Tea & Company by Caducus |
19-Nov-03/9:22 AM |
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Very moving - excellent metaphors. A truly touching poem - 10
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4-Dec-03/10:59 AM |
shhhhhh - Shuushin - just enjoy the words. (all your analyzing just might have given me a headache).
Richa - very nice tone - deep thoughts in so few lines. Lovely.
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11-Dec-03/6:57 AM |
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Haven't lost her yet thank God - but it's coming - and the thought hurts just as much.
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| Re: In my train-IN by ShaNoN+960317485 |
17-Dec-03/8:19 AM |
All I could picture was Yoda rubbin his bum...
mmmmgghhh - stuck i am young skywalker - bored, bored I am with this trainin - mmmgmgghhhh
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