on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2003, 6:42 AM
Some nice imagery, but I prefer the direct, explicit approach rather than the metaphorical one.
on Slimshady Meets Cali Hillbilly (I Don An Afro) by SupremeDreamer
4 Sep 2003, 10:48 PM
At least some parts of it made sense...I think.
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2003, 4:34 PM
Does your name rhyme with Janus or anus?
on Pain in Death by Freethinker1602
17 Sep 2003, 7:07 AM
I love pain. 9/10.
on After seven days in the sun by <~>
15 Sep 2003, 7:52 PM
A corpse, a coyote, and the craftiest rhyming of the word 'dead' I've heard since that night I bought an undead poet a drink. Maaaaaaaaarvelous, my dear. I'd give it a sixty-nine out of ten if I could, but instead I'll just go as high as I can and throw in my pants.
on Mourning Glory by William Delacroix
12 Sep 2003, 6:34 AM
Geez, you guys are supposed to be aspiring poets here. Has nobody heard of a glosa before? It starts with a quatrain, right, from another author. Of course you credit the person who wrote it. Then there are four ten-line stanzas, the last line of each referring back to the lines of the original quatrain in the order they appear. And there is no silent e at the end of poem.
on Seduce Like Zeus by EAger to Offend
10 Sep 2003, 6:29 AM
I want to seduce Zeus's swan.
on Small Place by crwncka1
10 Sep 2003, 6:23 AM
this poem absolutely blew me away. i'd give it a 666, but the highest i can go is a single digit.
on some deleted poem
8 Sep 2003, 6:38 AM
River of beer?
Rain paint?
Other than those two lines it was a cool poem. But is it an ode to flailing and fucking or ellipses?
Rain paint?
Other than those two lines it was a cool poem. But is it an ode to flailing and fucking or ellipses?
on some deleted poem
7 Sep 2003, 6:13 AM
Yeah, that is pretty useless. But I've never seen the idea before, so if you made it shorter, funnier, and gave it a clever title, it might be worth something.
on some deleted poem
7 Sep 2003, 6:20 AM
That is a pretty damn tiny poem; I had to bust out the magnifying glass and everything. Now is it "Stick the conditioner bottle in my ass" or "Lick the vein protruding from my penis"? 9/10.
on Provacation by J.B. Manning
3 Sep 2003, 9:26 AM
So I'm not the only one who thinks about ejaculation and masturbation and sex with androids (oops, that one slipped out), and is not afraid to admit it. I give it an 8 for its ample supply of rhymes.
on great caesar's ghost by bondjedi
2 Sep 2003, 7:13 AM
i give it a 3 just because i hate the word bitch so much.
on some deleted poem
2 Sep 2003, 7:12 AM
Nice imagery. It wasn't me that killed the old man, I swear. 9/10.
on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>
2 Sep 2003, 8:58 AM
This poem was so good it made me lose my pants. Where are they? Oh, there they are, around my ankles. Silly me. 10/10.
on some deleted poem
8 Sep 2003, 6:15 AM
I'm guessing there's a story behind this poem. Care to share it?
on Making Love by LucidRevelation
1 Oct 2003, 2:42 AM
More bodily fluids, please.
on elton is inside my left shoe by w~* ATHENA *~w
5 Oct 2003, 6:35 AM
The h in haiku is not silent, so it would a "a haiku." How am I supposed to know who Aida is?