it seems like a little to much of a "journal entry" type of poem. i really do like the question type of finish to each stanza. something i never did but really like the sound to it. you also throw exactly how you feel into writting. something i tend to stay away from but it helps the reader see the situation. thanks for commenting on my poem by the way.

Short and sweet. I know there is no punctuation but the poem is still be "played" with. I may even add another verse or two. but i just made this one last night and thought hey why not put it up on poemrankers so people can destroy it

haha great great limerick. first time giving this vote number but i think u deserve it. 10

remember lyrics are poems that should be set to music. well in music u usually have a chorus and the chorus is usually repeated. i don't see that in there. it's a decent song but i think it needs alittle more work. good job so far though. 6

almost gives a haiku feeling but to long. u should see maybe about chopping into a haiku or adding to it. give it an 8 though cuz i can feel it. nice job

i think ur trying to hard with your rhyming. most lyrics don't rhyme. You got to just let it flow instead of pushing to make things fit. overall i give it a 7

awesome work. kick the 0 people where it hurts!!!

i specifically put the periods in. i want pauses at the ends of the sentence. i personally wanted to slow down the reader. make them think about what they were reading. i never noticed you could only put 3 poems a week so i didn't even start with my personal favorite poems. but wait till next week.