poemranker ::20 most recent comments by justjay

Comments byjustjay, the 20 most recent. Include replies

on Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8 2 Aug 2003, 9:18 PM
awesome work. kick the 0 people where it hurts!!!
on To Lesley by Bahookie 18 Aug 2003, 8:31 PM
almost gives a haiku feeling but to long. u should see maybe about chopping into a haiku or adding to it. give it an 8 though cuz i can feel it. nice job
on some deleted poem 18 Aug 2003, 8:33 PM
i think overal it's a good poem but i get alittle confused with your punctuation. i have the same promblem with my poems though. give it a 7
on some deleted poem 18 Aug 2003, 8:42 PM
don't see anything and i think it has no effort into it. remember a computer screen is bigger then the little white box u see. try this again 0
on Jack Frost by Kitch 18 Aug 2003, 8:39 PM
remember lyrics are poems that should be set to music. well in music u usually have a chorus and the chorus is usually repeated. i don't see that in there. it's a decent song but i think it needs alittle more work. good job so far though. 6
on ode to kurt by NobodyGirl9 18 Aug 2003, 8:40 PM
haha great great limerick. first time giving this vote number but i think u deserve it. 10
on some deleted poem 6 Aug 2003, 5:34 PM
"not even worth pondering"
"I am a retired poet of age 24. I just would like to share some of my forgotten works"
maybe some people should stay retired and their work should be forgotten!
on Dance With Me by marvelis 5 Aug 2003, 9:22 PM
i think ur trying to hard with your rhyming. most lyrics don't rhyme. You got to just let it flow instead of pushing to make things fit. overall i give it a 7
on Mind Puddle by justjay 2 Aug 2003, 9:09 PM
i specifically put the periods in. i want pauses at the ends of the sentence. i personally wanted to slow down the reader. make them think about what they were reading. i never noticed you could only put 3 poems a week so i didn't even start with my personal favorite poems. but wait till next week.
on Untitled by justjay 18 Dec 2003, 10:55 AM
Short and sweet. I know there is no punctuation but the poem is still be "played" with. I may even add another verse or two. but i just made this one last night and thought hey why not put it up on poemrankers so people can destroy it
on What I Do Know by PsydewaysTears 4 Jan 2005, 9:37 PM
it seems like a little to much of a "journal entry" type of poem. i really do like the question type of finish to each stanza. something i never did but really like the sound to it. you also throw exactly how you feel into writting. something i tend to stay away from but it helps the reader see the situation. thanks for commenting on my poem by the way.