Re: Babelfish Poetry (V): 容易な思考 (Japanese) by Geschäftsreise	14-Sep-03/1:35 PM
I was surprised that it actually worked, because my screen is full of 0000's. 美しい、再度。
Re: My nails are in love with your chalkboard by Jeremi B. Handrinos	15-Sep-03/10:04 AM
I could think of lower forms of whoring.
Re: sitting at the cliff's edge by nentwined	15-Sep-03/10:12 AM
Beautiful, you made the repitition so meaningful and lyric. This line "clinging us each tighter to the other" was a little awkward, could do without the "us", I think- or possibly replace w/ "clinging each of us tighter to the other". 10
Re: A Night Nurse by The_Third_Isis	15-Sep-03/10:17 AM
hypos- hippos. I liked the play on the word pray/prey. The rhyme at the beginning made it seem cornier than you might have intended.
Re: playing the scratching game by nentwined	15-Sep-03/10:19 AM
Your comments are so constructive and thorough, you DO deserve comments in return.
Re: tRuNdLe WhEeL by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	15-Sep-03/10:23 AM
callipers is not in my dictionary, so I must agree with Dark Angel. Cute though. "Hum dum dee dum, dum dum dee dum, I'm so rumbly in my tumbly."
Re: Babelfish Poetry (VI): les Graines de Notre Fin (Français) by Geschäftsreise	16-Sep-03/9:37 AM
Nice fable about the "first subsidiary ones" (care to shed an original language translation that means more) I liked the line "La force de notre force ne peut pas dépasser la force de notre faiblesse" especially. Reminds me of the novel, "Ishmael".
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/9:40 AM
Your either/or is quite amusing. I'm a both/and kind of person.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/9:42 AM
Loved the last 2 lines.
Re: Can you comment and vote? by LuckyJoe	16-Sep-03/9:45 AM
I vote on everything, but you have to do something of higher quality than this (or something more repulsive) to get a comment every time!
Re: naive gazer by richa	16-Sep-03/9:47 AM
Beautiful. I have no complaints, and the poem seemed consistently good, no whimpy stanzas.
Re: End of year poem by <~>	16-Sep-03/9:49 AM
Your nature/interpersonal relations poems are always a joy to read, especially when they remind me that winter will be here soon.
Re: Cyber Junkie by J.B. Manning	16-Sep-03/4:06 PM
I like all of the references to rotting and impurity, it reminds me of those internet addicts who work as TA's in college computer labs with their greasy, unbathed appearances and smells- you know the ones who hang out in the lab even when they are off the clock. Exactly.
Re: My nails are in love with your chalkboard by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-Sep-03/4:20 PM
Why'd you have to ruin the illusion and expose that God's Wife's real name is Patricia? It's so ... ordinary! That was the damage done here, the character damage was reflected onto you.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/4:26 PM
Nice description and way of using it to make some political commentary. Why do you start out with "when 'you' went crosseyed" and then switch to "I". I think you should tell the reader it is you/the narrator all along. In this line, "did not last damn it me" is me a typo? I think the plural of lens may be lenses.
Re: A new beginning by hobojo	16-Sep-03/4:29 PM
Why no garlic?
Re: Mentor by <~>	16-Sep-03/4:32 PM
I loved these images, "you never stop at the skin of a word but ride that instinct through my veins." beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/4:36 PM
lispy- licious. That was fun. Damn, why didn't God say stay away from the temptation of brussel sprouts?
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/4:41 PM
You're a fickle pickle, which is tastier than the other kind of pickle.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/4:46 PM
Reminds me of "If I had a Hammer". Are you talking about god throughout this, or was that just one stanza. If it was just meant to be the one stanza, it seemed out of place, but if your love poem was about your relationship with god, I think you could use another reference to make it clearer.