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Free verse № 65366

End of year poem

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Sep 2003 · Edited 16 Sep 2003 · 6 comments

September is the wrong time to go-- not cold enough for sorrow and humidity disguises grief's waste of salt. October’s rime finds me. Out of warmth, I seek another heat and bargain through another moon. November's dearth shortens breath and I hide inside, bracing for the feast days. I have held out against the fading light. Dark within, dark without I stow solace, waiting for the out.

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[8] razorgrin 16-Sep-03/9:13 AM Reply
The stanza about September is wonderful.
[n/a] <~> › razorgrin 16-Sep-03/9:28 AM Reply
thankee. better, stronger, faster, now.
[9] nentwined 16-Sep-03/9:25 AM Reply
I liked "I hold solace in my hand", and though perhaps you could simply do something mure subtle with the ball dropping. waiting for the out bugs me more than the ball, I think. Though it's hard to say. And I don't really "get" stowing solace. an 8, here.
[9] nentwined 16-Sep-03/9:36 AM Reply
hmmyes. 9.
[10] http://mulberryfairy 16-Sep-03/9:49 AM Reply
Your nature/interpersonal relations poems are always a joy to read, especially when they remind me that winter will be here soon.
[10] Bill Z Bub 16-Sep-03/8:44 PM Reply
Beautiful,

and sad.

~bzb