on My Life as a Book by molly
10 Aug 2002, 9:28 PM
clear imagery, good encapsulation of the moment. =)
on For fun by Cha no Onna
17 Apr 2002, 7:18 PM
*snicker* two-fiddy, two-fiddy.
on Raining in Dream by memorybabe
17 Sep 2002, 8:46 AM
There's a lot of detrius in the beginning of this; meaningless phrases. Perhaps your intended effect; but it shrouds the meaning you're heading for in the second half.
on Spellbound by Limness
17 Sep 2002, 8:49 AM
Not only a beautiful sentiment, but flawlessly executed as well.
on Remember-me (an ode to those dropped off at the clinic) by Bachus
17 Sep 2002, 8:52 AM
One can admire the work without admiring the sentiment. A worthy lesson, at least.
on some deleted poem
17 Jul 2002, 2:32 PM
It's about my job - I transcribe for a Neurology clinic; so his words are always describing the patients' pains.
on some deleted poem
17 Jul 2002, 2:34 PM
the image of the candle is supposed to invoke the paradox of light against the darkness (relief of his pain) versus the traditional end of a moth and a candle - destruction. Relieving his pain will destroy him. yah?
on Assassin's Song by Tekara
19 May 2002, 10:29 PM
Hmm.. I wonder if I know this person, too?
on Earthquake by ifni
24 Jun 2002, 6:11 PM
The poem is about stopping to think; a difficult word is intended to enhance that effect. =)
on some deleted poem
16 May 2002, 5:53 PM
mmm... off beat. In a left field kind of way. Made me stop for a second.
on some deleted poem
6 May 2002, 10:53 PM
guess you have to be here to understand the power of the rain. very cool.
on some deleted poem
6 May 2002, 10:54 PM
powerful. so many strive for this literary bent and fail. You do it as naturally as breathing.
on Cour by Cha no Onna
9 May 2002, 7:16 PM
It's not because you no longer care, but because you no longer _fear_ . =)
on some deleted poem
1 May 2002, 2:55 PM
and notice that it was written two days before 9/11. Coincidence, sure. But I usually don't write poems about my premonitions. =P
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This is like an "aftershock" of Burning Night, right? I think the funny thing is that woodsmoke is such a comforting smell to most people.
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This is like an "aftershock" of Burning Night, right? I think the funny thing is that woodsmoke is such a comforting smell to most people.
on some deleted poem
1 May 2002, 2:58 PM
Very like. I was trying to keep up on a "100 poems in 100 days" LiveJournal. It'd been 5 or 6 days since I visited last... and I was a little frustrated. *laughter*
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Sounds like a creative writing class I once attended. Ten haiku a session for nine weeks. Ugh!
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Sounds like a creative writing class I once attended. Ten haiku a session for nine weeks. Ugh!
on Human self pity by Service
21 Apr 2002, 2:00 PM
moments of clarity through a general incomprehensibility.
on (untitled) by Mystifying
21 Apr 2002, 2:05 PM
Arg! Line wrap!!
on To You by Cha no Onna
11 Sep 2002, 11:48 PM
I rather liked stanza 4. But then I guess I'm into odd line breaks.
on pull by skaskowski
16 May 2002, 5:53 PM
very evocative.
on A Man Of The World by vulcan
17 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
I wonder how many stories about green fairies this poem has engendered.