| Re: {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8 |
22-Aug-02/8:53 PM |
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ah, i am jealous....but not too much. you see, i just came from a dinner at a farm with many friends. we drank chardonnay...much chardonnay...
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| Re: Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
22-Aug-02/8:47 PM |
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ah! there are few who could prawne off a tale like this in such a splendid manner! i am glad i saved it until i could fully enjoy it, savor it, as LeChoadk savored his faithful (and squealing) servant. thanks for a rollicking tale, -=Dark_Angel=- !
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| Re: The Matrix by DespondentDotCom |
22-Aug-02/1:35 PM |
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more like a cybergeek wankathon, if you ask me...which you didn't.
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| Re: ode to bad taco meat by gay |
22-Aug-02/1:28 PM |
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are you SURE this isn't the real dark angel? (me thinks it lacks a certain special something...to be HIS)
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| Re: Life On Earth by dougsoderstrom |
22-Aug-02/10:28 AM |
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oh there is a sure and swift way out. i'll be the first to volunteer to help in THAT endeavor...
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| Re: Economics 499 by ErgoErgun |
22-Aug-02/8:53 AM |
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| Re: Bad habits & tramps by horus8 |
22-Aug-02/8:52 AM |
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mind-boggling, and boggle-minded. almost makes you wanna...nevermind. reminds me of that time my friends and i gave that hitchhiker a 'ride home' from woodstock (94)....oh thrills we had...
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| Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles |
22-Aug-02/8:30 AM |
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the hobbit is a badtime story, compared to LOTR. give yourself a nice little treat, and read it.
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| Re: life by da_dark_wan |
22-Aug-02/7:38 AM |
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something you should be deprived of?
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| Re: Am I forgiven by da_dark_wan |
22-Aug-02/7:36 AM |
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i can never forgive you for subjecting the world to this crap.
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| Re: Sunshine by alexander |
22-Aug-02/7:35 AM |
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sunshine...on my shoulders...makes me hapeeee...until i have to pay the damn deductible, that is. nice haiku, though.
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| Re: Hunny by Venus |
21-Aug-02/9:25 PM |
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i'll add my voice to the choir venus. this is good stuff.
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| Re: Sexxodus by Shin-Bojangles |
21-Aug-02/8:57 PM |
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mr. bojangles, this is sooo SWEET. not even a samurai could kick this guy's rumbling bumble! shaven or not, this really tickled me. someplace special.
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| Re: The Confession by [mojo] |
21-Aug-02/1:51 PM |
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good god mojo! youscare me out of my skin!
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| Re: Secret, Admirer by <~> |
21-Aug-02/1:40 PM |
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mrs. god--no boudaries are crossed. i asked for help, afterall. i liked the assonance and allitleration there -all the v's and i's... i guess ienjoy tripping over my own tongue. keep the the comments coming, mrs. g.
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| Re: Secret, Admirer by <~> |
21-Aug-02/1:08 PM |
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also in this set-apart stanza--lowercase 'i', for innocent...
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| Re: Secret, Admirer by <~> |
21-Aug-02/1:06 PM |
zzinnia66 -- 21-Aug-02, 01:06 PM
no, i used 'ejaculations' because i wanted to convey a sense of raw, driven urges--other peoples heat pouring in through my childhood bedroom window. 'incubi', 'came', 'unprotected', 'cruisers'--all sex words, forcing their way into an innocent's dreams... too obscure?
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| Re: cold sonnet by <~> |
21-Aug-02/12:53 PM |
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i think my problem is that i spend a lot of time in my head. my thoughts wrap themselves in polysyllabic mantles; i think with those words. you're not the first to mention that my words are too complex to flow. i tried to work on that, to simplify the description in a rewrite of secret, admirer. did you see the first version?
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| Re: Secret, Admirer by <~> |
21-Aug-02/8:59 AM |
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okay, the muse has spoken. what say you all? does this accomplish my goal? now, i think it's less scattered, and i THINK there is a more concrete sense of narrative... y or n?
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| Re: Shelter by poetandknowit |
21-Aug-02/12:17 AM |
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i'll only trash it if it's shaped like colorado. deal?
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