Re: a comment on Kindling by <~>	20-Nov-02/8:09 AM
scraps--you don't like the convoluted metaphor of food/wood leftovers being 'fed' (consumed) by that which prepares the food? the whole business of the residual of how he earns the food and nothing wasted from the job either? no? that's why i used scraps. i wanted nothing wasted. i wanted the wood to be food as well. spent--echoes 'exausted' in meaning. good vowel repeat. i'm a sucker for sonorous soundings, p&k. yes?
Re: a comment on The Sea by Moss	20-Nov-02/7:59 AM
i'll have one, thank you very much. do you have any with kelp frosting?
Re: a comment on Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones	20-Nov-02/7:56 AM
i wish i could hear it though. pretty please?
Re: The Sea by Moss	20-Nov-02/7:54 AM
ooohhh. yesss. well done. have a ten, for your insight.
Re: Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss	20-Nov-02/7:53 AM
if only there were a 'near-vilanelle' option. i am disappointed you call it one and do not deliver. i'll come back and reread when less jaded.
Re: a comment on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki	20-Nov-02/7:03 AM
thanks for the pity. learn what sarcasm is. it'll take you far in life.
Re: a comment on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness	19-Nov-02/10:56 PM
that's a phrase. a label. and true. publish the furnace-builder. it'll make me smile in the morning.
Re: a comment on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness	19-Nov-02/10:39 PM
fuck you.
Re: a comment on I Stand Mesmerized by abbaslittleclingon	19-Nov-02/10:25 PM
ahem. i live in the suburbs. pictures to prove it. etc, etc. mrs.g has the magic of line breaks working for her too. you have to give her that. and she can be spare to great effect, which i like. i'm no fan of the flotsam and jetsam above (which is mostly why i kept my fingers out of her pie). i stick to flavors i like. like sunburnt mountain boys and chicas des angeles.
Re: a comment on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness	19-Nov-02/10:17 PM
yes. but make it a triangle. please.
Re: a comment on Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones	19-Nov-02/10:48 AM
if these are your reasons, then please link to a soundfile of someone speaking it. then the english speakers here can appreciate it for it's sounds. maybe horus will record you and post it at gangbox, like he did with mrs.g. throws a whole new light on things, it does.
Re: a comment on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness	19-Nov-02/7:04 AM
i'm going to side with mrs.g on this. using "those" and referring to the words pushes the speaker waaay back--very stunned. makes a 'thing' of the words themselves, giving them the power they have had to sting. see it?
Re: Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones	19-Nov-02/6:40 AM
translation please?
Re: a comment on Boy I Know by Goose	18-Nov-02/1:13 PM
hey, what's good for the goose is not good for the gander anyway.
Re: a comment on Faith... by loneshadow29	18-Nov-02/1:00 PM
what about bugs? you could write about forensic entymology--you know, what happens to our bodies after we die, or at least after we are immobile and exposed to insects--whichever comes first. that's fucking depressing enough for anyone. see: http://folk.uio.no/mostarke/forens_ent/afterdeath.shtml
Re: The Breathing Dead by Caducus	18-Nov-02/12:39 PM
i think you meant 'pillar' of salt, but it sounds like you cried over her until you had a pillow of salt, which is strangely satisfying to the unrequited side of me. fix your last line, okay?
Re: The beauty of a bird by mozac	18-Nov-02/12:37 PM
you ask too many questions. and no clews are forthcoming. bah.
Re: Boy I Know by Goose	18-Nov-02/12:36 PM
damn. i am fresh out of tissues too. oh well. the crocodiles can have em. maybe change the first line to '25 going on dead'?
Re: Faith... by loneshadow29	18-Nov-02/12:34 PM
couldn't you write about trees or fishing or murder or something?
Re: a comment on I Begged by abbaslittleclingon	18-Nov-02/6:45 AM
i agree. you lose the mystic of it with the last line. the transfiguration of the end to the beginning, of death to life--it's beautiful done. but the last line is cheap. think harder. write a more fiting conclusion.