Re: the abandoned sea by crin	13-Aug-02/10:05 PM
i think that the repeat works nicely; the crashing rhythm echoing that of it's namesake. the use of the sea as a thief, a receptor of losses--has been done so many times, and i think you used it neatly here, by twisting the metaphor so that taker becomes the one who has lost.
Re: annoying relative by kthulah	13-Aug-02/10:13 PM
it took me a while to get inside this one. i'm glad i came back to it. i am feeling the swell of it, and keening with you.
Re: silence of the sky by david	13-Aug-02/10:15 PM
thank you, that gives me more. and more.
Re: rock me to sleep tonight: by Sapphire	13-Aug-02/10:19 PM
sing-songy and lovely.
Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo]	14-Aug-02/6:29 AM
so deftly done. so hungry. so thoughtless. so ubiquitous. i like.
Re: of the bad hard drive by david	14-Aug-02/6:42 AM
"this sort of thing has cropped up before and it has always been due to human error."
Re: Flying by markmidgett	14-Aug-02/6:49 AM
yes. yes.
Re: The War by Tarquin De La Bog	14-Aug-02/7:14 AM
the first 3 stanzas are off like a shot; the last 2 falter/drain the strength of what you were buolding up to. the language loses its crispness.
Re: ungle stop by wowzers718	14-Aug-02/7:14 AM
i certainly wouldn't write THIS poem about it.
Re: Potential Tragedy by [mojo]	14-Aug-02/7:16 AM
thoughtless, above, referring to the drive of the potential, not to the poem. the poem is well-thought-out.
Re: Salt by <~>	14-Aug-02/8:52 AM
incorrect answer, but i'll buy you a beer anyway. this one's a layered riddle.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Aug-02/9:05 AM
Robert--please email me. i would like to ask you a question about salt
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Aug-02/9:33 AM
it's all different now, p&k. read it again. he wants to stay, to go back, to regain what is lost. instead, he's in the middle of the road, and chooses to turn away.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Aug-02/11:32 AM
so easy to remain stuck in this eddy.
Re: Thorns by poetandknowit	14-Aug-02/11:35 AM
"allowing the room to offer itself to moonlight" so pretty.
Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512	14-Aug-02/11:45 AM
and now, for your entertainment, a poem by the living dead.
Re: Salt by <~>	14-Aug-02/11:53 AM
actually, one of the constructs i enjoyed the most in making it is the way the rhyme doubles back on itself in the first part (aba, cbc, cbc, aba), and then the final stanza's marked, 'deed', which is what caused the pain and the decision in the first place. funny how you can lauch it off 14 years later. salt still stings, remembering...
Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512	14-Aug-02/12:05 PM
she died at the end, p&k. who do you think wrote it?
Re: white harvest by <~>	14-Aug-02/8:06 PM
ah, doylum, you are not nearly so disappointed as my creditors.
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	14-Aug-02/8:42 PM
yeah! i think they should kick you out too! because you use dirty words. and when i read your poems, i think bad thoughts. and i get so confused. and you're different than me. and that's scary too. and you don't use spell check either. maybe a good garrotting would teach you a lesson. and besides, it sounds like you did some things that were ILLEGAL. and who let you in here, anyway? how about a night in the iron maiden? that would teach you not to write about touching yourself in the bushes!!!!! yeah. kick him out. yeah.