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13-Dec-02/7:51 AM |
She became for
a moment what Magdalene
had all those years.
had been?
had, for all...
this is unclear to me.
also, sapphire. (2 p's)
why did she become 'without a mouth'? she could not speak? she was unkissed? is that why she asked him to wait?
a little more, a little more. you need minor tweaking to make this radiant.
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13-Dec-02/6:19 PM |
this is mythic.
what does the title mean?
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15-Dec-02/8:55 PM |
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oh boy. guess i better repent, huh? HEY! p&k, horus, LOOK OUT! you'd better start saving up, because ol' briggsy here has got our number!
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15-Dec-02/9:00 PM |
i think you must be young. maybe not innocent. read more. forget him. (or her--whatever) think more. make comparisons mentally. then write. and if it's fluff, keep trying until it's not. as a point of reference, check out emily dickinson:
http://www.bartleby.com/113/100.html
i think that's where you're aiming. and, keep trying. but think more than you write.
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15-Dec-02/9:01 PM |
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thus spake the book of Ian, chapter 2, verse...uh...
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| Re: fa11ing by Bill Z Bub |
15-Dec-02/9:09 PM |
fucking finally. thank you. one that's not pathetic.
p.s.--like the titular device.
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| Re: fa11ing by Bill Z Bub |
15-Dec-02/9:10 PM |
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oh, technically, still summer--10 days left, and whutnot. call me a pedant.
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| Re: A holiday warning by INTRANSIT |
15-Dec-02/9:13 PM |
why? you give no reason. will i be arrested for buying hot merch off the back of one? are they poorly driven? are they forming a new hybrid-gang--sort of a C.H.U.D. but rubber and metal?
you must give flesh if you want grey to function. bones are not enough. your voice cannot be made out unless you speak. in complete thoughts.
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| Re: First Site by angel_uy |
15-Dec-02/9:27 PM |
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16-Dec-02/10:01 PM |
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (psychedelic) by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/8:19 AM |
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (esoteric) by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/8:19 AM |
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damn. damn, damn damn. have a 10, for being so damn zen.
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| Re: with no words to write by nentwined |
17-Dec-02/11:01 AM |
howzabout switching it to read thusly:
spun wholecloth from ethers, the ethereal nothing
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| Re: Popaul by Nicholas Jones |
17-Dec-02/11:03 AM |
don't mind p&k. he gets cranky. i get bitchy. horus babbles. etc. keep posting.
i don't know what popaul is. wanna tell me?
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17-Dec-02/11:27 AM |
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17-Dec-02/12:22 PM |
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| Re: can't by nentwined |
18-Dec-02/7:27 AM |
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run! run! they're coming for you!
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| Re: UltraSound by UnityMitford |
18-Dec-02/7:29 AM |
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so, it's a girl then? or is it a ==doylum?
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18-Dec-02/7:31 AM |
no. sorry, i can't. i have no vocal cords. i think it's damn insensitive of you to post this.
i just haven't been the same since, "The Accident."
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| Re: February Loneliness by BenRice |
18-Dec-02/7:36 AM |
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what is the relationship of the retriever to the shooter?
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